|Originally posted by Trancelover03591 |
I wrote/produced this track and also am on vocals. I don't really know the genre. Maybe dreampop/progressive house or something. Feedback on anything-the songwriting, production, vocals-is appreciated:
The vocals are really rough. I'd recommend investing in something like melodyne if you want to use your own vocals. More than anything, you need to practice. The tone isn't very good and you drift in & out of pitch a lot. Often, it sounds like you know the note you're trying to hit, but don't initially hit it, and need to drift to it.
The reverb/delay effect on the vocals too is really distracting and doesn't add anything. The effects in the hook in particular I think just don't suit the song whatsoever. You'd probably get better results if you didn't distort it like that and instead performed it multiple times and layered it. That way you can do imaging in the chorus. Some harmonic content would benefit it too.
If you struggle with pitch you might find it easier to get a pleasing performance by recording the exact same performance many times and layering them with chorus, panning, etc.
I think the lyrics are extremely cheesy but that's kind of canon for this kind of thing. The repeated "this" in the chorus.. idk.
The track itself is totally fine though and would work well if the vocals were greatly improved.
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Last edited by Seandroid on Nov-27-2014 at 10:47