Dave I want to listen but I'm having my intermittent SC playing issue. I'll keep trying.

Thx for the feedback on mine, yes I was thinking I need to look at the structure.

Bluff I really like the blending of your timing with mine but I'll see what others say. Personally I like your synth renders and didn't think it was too wet and I can add more filter work if needbe - there is one in there very subtly.

Tyler thx for the feedback. Don't know why you like the vocal it's pretty dreadful the way it comes in like that!

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Originally posted by tehlord It's going to be a subtle 'issue' as I couldn't nail down exactly what part of what note was jarring with my ear, and if it was just plain wrong that would have been easy. And as if you'd get it wrong I actually think the vocals could come forward a little bit (as this is a WIP). There's probably a little bit too much in the 200hz range and not enough in the 8k+ air range to bring her forward a little bit more.

Thanks Geoff! The other version that I mentioned has the upper harmony pulled forward a bit during the chorus and just a better/more complete mix all around, plus some added synths. I think I'll address some of those pitch issues that you and Deillon mentioned and post that version when I get home this evening.

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Originally posted by Richard Butler Tyler thx for the feedback. Don't know why you like the vocal it's pretty dreadful the way it comes in like that!

I don't think so, I think it's fine where it comes in. The delay though...

FIXED IT! I took out the 4x4 drums completely and replaced them with some breaks and shtuff. I also added more synths and effects, AND fixed the piano's stereo stuff as well as some other EQ things I noticed were off. I don't know, my friends (who aren't that into music) couldn't tell the difference between the two but I think you might.

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Originally posted by meriter okay this is done, thanks tyler for saying how repetitive the middle part was, the changes I made ended up being my favorite part of the track

Yes! Cool! Nice lofi edge without actually being lofi.

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Originally posted by Seandroid I like the chord progression well enough but I feel like it's really missing something to give it any forward momentum. It lulls along too much. I don't know how far done you are though. I'm super pumped about how this is coming out.

I like that Seandroid, particularly once it kicks in at 0:59. The breakdown before that feels a little detached from the rest of the music to me, but it's obviously early in the process, so I'll be interested to see where you take it.

Anyway, here's the alternate version of my song with a few more synths and a somewhat better mix (IMO). I still need to work on the vocals a bit (EQ, de-ess, some pitchiness here and there, etc.). Listening at work and the bass sounds sorta mushy to me.

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Definitely de-essing.

But as a whole it doesn't convince me.

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cool track, easy to groove along too!! good work!

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Originally posted by Seandroid I like the chord progression well enough but I feel like it's really missing something to give it any forward momentum. It lulls along too much. I don't know how far done you are though. I'm super pumped about how this is coming out.

hmmmmm i can see the sound your aiming for, that kinda Madeon sound. Couple of things spoil it for me...the kick, snare/hats and also the piano part
Seems to be some bass or something to drive the track when it drops - also i would bring your hats way up. On listening again i think it could do with some sort of mid-bass to drive the low-mids, something to support the twisted bass sound? just my 2c......

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Originally posted by Tyler James FIXED IT! I took out the 4x4 drums completely and replaced them with some breaks and shtuff. I also added more synths and effects, AND fixed the piano's stereo stuff as well as some other EQ things I noticed were off. I don't know, my friends (who aren't that into music) couldn't tell the difference between the two but I think you might.

its ok, its something different - id just be worried that it isnt going anywhere next but its only a wip so keep at it

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Originally posted by cryophonik I like that Seandroid, particularly once it kicks in at 0:59. The breakdown before that feels a little detached from the rest of the music to me, but it's obviously early in the process, so I'll be interested to see where you take it. Anyway, here's the alternate version of my song with a few more synths and a somewhat better mix (IMO). I still need to work on the vocals a bit (EQ, de-ess, some pitchiness here and there, etc.). Listening at work and the bass sounds sorta mushy to me.

the vocal sits nicely - its well upfront, some slight sibilance but that should be easily fixed.
I think the accompanying music could be better, im not really liking the flow of it, i dont think it is doing justice to the vocal :-/

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Originally posted by evo8 hmmmmm i can see the sound your aiming for, that kinda Madeon sound. Couple of things spoil it for me...the kick, snare/hats and also the piano part Seems to be some bass or something to drive the track when it drops - also i would bring your hats way up. On listening again i think it could do with some sort of mid-bass to drive the low-mids, something to support the twisted bass sound? just my 2c......

I wasn't really going for Madeon actually. More like Feed Me. Thanks for the input though. The piano break I think will get a better lead into the drop section.

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