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Originally posted by Richard Butler I think this has big potential just add a short quirky vocal that appears now n then G00d work mate I dont care if things are supposedly cheesy

Tightened up a bit

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Last edited by SystematicX1 on Jan-13-2019 at 02:18

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Originally posted by Richard Butler This could be the 2nd track to my new EP but it's just ok, nothing great tbh

Oh snap Richard...Super chill. Freakin really love this. I have to say, the second half of the track didnt flow (2:24) as well for me but never the less...brilliant!

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Yeah F3B is crying for a vocal. I that a guitar sample? Have you tried expanding on the guitar lick so it's not repeating as much?

Ocean Roll's sub bass line is just sublime!

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Originally posted by SystematicX1 Tightened up a bit

Its catchy

around 1.08 I'd think of bringing in a little square wave plinky plonky lead. Now that tech talk Rann would be proud of!

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Originally posted by Richard Butler This could be the 2nd track to my new EP but it's just ok, nothing great tbh

Nice job Rich. Great sounds, my downstairs neighbours probably don't like the kick I agree with Phil on the flow in second part.

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Starts nice, mix is nice, maybe you should expand on guitar as Mel suggested. That big commercial trance sound later is not my cup of tea.

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Originally posted by Richard Butler This could be the 2nd track to my new EP but it's just ok, nothing great tbh

Pretty sweet work Richard, nice chillout atmosphere are were able to create around those jazzy chords lol - at first I was thinking that bass is a bit too much pushed forward but at the and, I think, it blends nicely together with the rest

But one think (if I can recommend) this pluck coming at at 2:21 you may have to layer with different sounds to be more sophisticated lol.

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Last edited by TranceLover007 on Feb-07-2019 at 22:13

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Originally posted by gordan100 This could be close to finish

You are making nice improvement man, every time you upload new WIP I can hear persistent progress in your technical production skills

Going back to your track - I can hear the need for your drums to come more forward and make more variations in there patterns to glue together this production.

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Originally posted by SystematicX1 Tightened up a bit

Phil, I can't put my fingers around this track - from one perspective I like this melodic idea but from another, I don't hear anything driving this WIP enough to make me move with it (if you know what I mean).

I would start with this guitar (if this is a guitar?) sound at 0:05 sec mark - I would make sure that this sounds really authentic guitar sounds as this is a part of your primary riff elements. Later on (and here is the part I really have a problem identifying an issue) I would try to find a way of clearly defined rhythm/groove/vibe in your production.

It is only my view on this WIP so please don't take this too serious if you disagree

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Here is my humble WIP in Funk/Disco style so at this point may work may not be a perfect reflection of this style but at lease I will take on this production challenge

Give it a run (I know is short at this point) and let me know if I met this Funk/Disco standards

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Originally posted by TranceLover007 Phil, I can't put my fingers around this track - from one perspective I like this melodic idea but from another, I don't hear anything driving this WIP enough to make me move with it (if you know what I mean). I would start with this guitar (if this is a guitar?) sound at 0:05 sec mark - I would make sure that this sounds really authentic guitar sounds as this is a part of your primary riff elements. Later on (and here is the part I really have a problem identifying an issue) I would try to find a way of clearly defined rhythm/groove/vibe in your production. It is only my view on this WIP so please don't take this too serious if you disagree Cheers, Darek

Darek,

So ,the version I uploaded for some reason had the sub off. I as well didnt have a lot of channels on for some reason.
The new one has those "driven" areas addressed.
As for the guitar area...The first guitar you hear is a sample and the second guitar (the scratch strumming) is me.
What I believe you are hearing is the "tube" effect...I could be wrong. Or,were you referring to the progression of the notes?

Another note...I am most certainly sold on this being a vocal track. I am also composing the track in such a manner, meaning that the vox will start at :08 (yes, on it's own it sounds a little off on the beat count,but there is a reason)

The Arp, for now, is a placeholder as I am still auditioning tones but I am thinking it could be a good replacement for a lead. Thus letting the vox stand out more as it is going to need a pretty powerful voice.

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