In that case, go back and fix what was wrong with the first one. Doing the exact same thing over and over again is just going to lead you to frustration.
And tension is arguably the single most important factor in any music. Dance music doubly so, trance triply so; tracks don't work without the buildup of tension--rhythmically, through dissonance, repetition, or any of a thousand other ways--and its release. Trance is all about ups and downs, builds and releases, and if you're presenting something as a work in progress (as opposed to a technical exercise) that needs to be a consideration from the moment you begin structuring the track.
I mean, what feedback are we supposed to provide on this work in progress? It's an intro with nice sound design and that's about it. Kick, hat, bass, some floaty FX. If this is actually in progress, there needs to be something there to critique, and it needs to show it's actually doing something.
If all you were doing was a technical exercise in mixing, that's not a WIP and I'd question its fitness or utility in the context of this thread's purpose.