The only thing I used from the original was the vocals. Appreciate any feedback.
For me the vocal kinda spoils your track it just don't seem to go with it. Was never a fan of the original which don't help but I honestly think it would be better without it!
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Originally posted by clay
good mix but it really lacks a memorable melody or a hook.
Agree..
Yeah sorry rich this is far from your best work not feeling this one.
Apr-06-2014 20:59
evo8
Virtual Wannabe
Registered: Aug 2004
Location:
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Originally posted by Richard Butler
I'm pleased with this WIP so far. Am planning to find and pay a decent vocalist for it.
Any crits welcome.
its ok Richard but ive heard better from you - main criticism from me is that it sounds a bit samey all the way through.....
Originally posted by Richard Butler
I'm pleased with this WIP so far. Am planning to find and pay a decent vocalist for it.
Any crits welcome.
Big fan of this actually...the "samey-ness" is not at all a bad thing for what this track seems to be.
It's quite enjoyable to listen to. Really like all of the subtlety. Release at 1:20 was nice. The fact that it's so laid back makes it nice to chill/zone out to
Takes me back to older drum and bass. I had a massive playlist of tracks of this nature.
Med-hi's/hi's were a little intense, had to turn it down . (dubbed snare / snare mainly)
If you do plan on vocals, maybe adhere to the oldschool tradition of a catch phrase inserted every now and then. Other than that *thumbs up*.
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Apr-07-2014 03:31
tehlord
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Jan 2009
Location: Windsor
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Originally posted by Richard Butler
I'm pleased with this WIP so far. Am planning to find and pay a decent vocalist for it.
Any crits welcome.
Great track there with some unusually bright themes for you, but I'm not sold on the bass sound. It sounds like there's some weird filtering on it that doesn't work on my cans.
A singer would really do it justice though. What kind of thing are you looking for?
The only thing I used from the original was the vocals. Appreciate any feedback.
Not a bad remix at all.
I think the mix is a little dense around the mid/highs. If I had to guess I'd say it had gone through a MB compressor which has pushed these freq's at the cost of the mid/lows where your bass and drum punch may have been lost a bit.
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I haven't really made much music of my own lately, although I did start this little ambient/filmy thing yesterday which I think I'll persevere with.
I haven't really made much music of my own lately, although I did start this little ambient/filmy thing yesterday which I think I'll persevere with.
For sure captured the atmosphere vibe on that one...vocal shots seem right on cue. Loved that oboe (was/is that an oboe?)as it brought a nice touch in the higher frequency change up.
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Throwing this up for ridicule. This track has almost been the death of me but I refused to accept defeat. Still have some tightening up on the composition to do (vocals and timing always give me the hardest time).
I am also curious about the bass arrangement...not quite sure about it. At any rate..here is a test wip remix for Tritonal's Colors.
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Apr-07-2014 15:17
Richard Butler
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Registered: Apr 2009
Location: London
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Originally posted by tehlord
Spot on for atmospheric film scape, reminds me of the epic film The Kingdom Of Heaven (Ridley Scot)
Try playing this vid from about 50 seconds in with the sound down and start your track there
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Thanks for the words on mine - singer wise, don't know but it's got to be decent so am willing to pay. But first I want to address the blandness people mention, try to and give the track more variation.
The bass I added subtle pitchy and syncy edits to the sound and wasn't sure if I'd get away with it. I think you may be picking up on this. I will listen with fresh muff
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Apr-07-2014 16:21
Richard Butler
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Apr 2009
Location: London
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Originally posted by scorpradio
Throwing this up for ridicule. This track has almost been the death of me but I refused to accept defeat. Still have some tightening up on the composition to do (vocals and timing always give me the hardest time).
I am also curious about the bass arrangement...not quite sure about it. At any rate..here is a test wip remix for Tritonal's Colors.
Firstly there's a lot to like here so well done.
In terms of constructive crits I noticed the following;
+ At about .45 I would vary the drums or add a layer there for a while.
+ 1.15 - the white noise sweep is a bit unoriginal
+ The synths just after this might want to be a bit louder for impact
+ 1.40 - that snare roll - do something to make it a bit more original and ear catching
+ Bass - it's good but not quite tight enough with a few notes sounding out of time - I've done this sort of thing and know how hard it is. Set aside an hour just to focus on that alone and you might find you pin it.
I wonder if some of the bass notes / phrases could do with being another sound?
Sounds good enough to finish tho bro.
Apr-07-2014 16:37
Raphie
Mastering Engineer
Registered: Jun 2008
Location: Lelystad, Netherlands
something a bit more experimental
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Apr-08-2014 19:08
PaULiN0
Twinkle, Twinkle..
Registered: Mar 2014
Location: Outer Space
Very Cool Raph ^
Ok here what I was trying to do with this is getting back to basics, trying to find the right sounds that fit well with each other but not certainly the best or most popular but well organized. I used a slow approach even at 130 BPM. I know already this won't do good in the markets but its totally me and for me. I forgot what else to say. Opinions welcome.
Apr-08-2014 22:07
evo8
Virtual Wannabe
Registered: Aug 2004
Location:
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Originally posted by Raphie
something a bit more experimental
raphie, really cool this, love the intro and i think the whole thing would sound better "beatless" imo
love that sync sound as well
Ok here what I was trying to do with this is getting back to basics, trying to find the right sounds that fit well with each other but not certainly the best or most popular but well organized. I used a slow approach even at 130 BPM. I know already this won't do good in the markets but its totally me and for me. I forgot what else to say. Opinions welcome.
fuck the markets, make something you are happy with