|Originally posted by Juan Paulino |
Can you tell me at what point you hear the conflicting notes. I'm trying to train my ear for melodies. Thank you man, I appreciate it.
Ok, It's just difficult to comment on melody because I wouldn't want to get in the way of someone thinking outside of the box, perhaps making something that is intended to be outside of conventional chord relationships.
So, my comments really are intended at the very least to identify where the notes go outside of what generally sounds 'right' :-)
Intro 0:00 - 0:55, all at F, high F. Fine - really like it :-)
Bass comes in 0:56 - 1:23. Fine - sounds right.
Lead 'swell' lets call it, 1:24 - 2:33, again like this, sounds fine.
Top Arp 2:33 onwards. This is the first bit that doesn't sit well in my opinion.
When this kicks in you are effectively picking out one note in the chords (bottom note first) 'F,A#,D' and 'F,A,C'. You select D and C. I think here it falls too far away from the core F and you might benefit from either using the middle notes in the chord A, A# there or at least doubling up so that you are using 'D,A#' and 'C,A' to keep more of a link.
Well I would continue but I just read Rodri's comment and must agree, though I would say start out from 2:33 onwards and take it in a different direction, as all that I would have said from this point on is that 'if the previous note had been X then Y would work here' and it gets too involved :-)
Again, sorry if thats too invasive of your tune but that is how I hear it :-)