cons

-the song is pretty repetitive
-some of the samples and instruments are really bad choices (there is a hihat hit that sounds straight out of the standard FL Studio sample pack), there is a crash that is bad, the hi synth with a lot of delay is a bit cheesy and some of the synths are very mono.
-it doesn't develop

pros

-The song shows potential
-it is restrained
-I like some of the elements like the bass
-I like the underlying melodies
-decently mixed

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well i appreciate the feedback/opinion, man.

I could say i agree with Trancelover up there.

The first 40 seconds of the track, the intro was very well spread out, deep and lush, and really kept my attention, creating that slow, proggy percussive rythm was very effective in my opinion, BUTTT, i'd choose, or filter drastically to alter the tone of the short hi hat.

The melodies were wonderful, through out the whole track

BuTTT, the melodies cry for a deeper synth, with more dynamic range, maybe gradually opening up a lp filter on them, w/ some stronger impact as well, cutting delays and reverbs rythmically.

I'd change the LFO rate on the phasor on that pad during the breakdown, give it a slower rotation, swooshing it around slower as it would vibe well w/ the rest of track.

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thanks a lot sicc. i agree with your input.

it's my first real attempt at a breaks-like track but i quite enjoyed doing it.

take care

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Originally posted by DistantSyndrome thanks a lot sicc. i agree with your input. it's my first real attempt at a breaks-like track but i quite enjoyed doing it. take care

yeah working w/ breaks is always fun.

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