I have been trying to get better at composing tracks...mostly failing but I was hoping ya'll could offer some pointers.

My Mind (HQ Stream)
My Mind (LQ Stream)
My Mind (Download)

___________________
Yes, I like to ruin perfectly good songs.
Yes, I know I have a problem.
No, I'm not going to do anything about it.

Rihanna - Please Don't Stop The Music (Sex Club Reject Remix)

<CART===LEMMY>

Last edited by cartlemmy on Apr-05-2005 at 22:16

Hey mate!

Listened to your track. First thing that comes in mind: It is a prodigy kind of trancy track. There are some heavy synth melodies in it.

I do not like the snaredrum you use, I don't mean the riff because that is quite heavy but the sort of snaredrum you use, it sounds to cheap. the bass sound could also be fuller and more pulsating

The melodybuilding from 1.50 to the end of the track is quite good. The synths could be better and the sound is not really trancy. But if you were able to master this track better and get a fuller more trebled sound this track is quite original.

It is neither trance, nor breakbeat, nor techno so you created something rather original. But really you have an original approach to making a song and I bet you will only become better.

Cheers,

Nomen Nescio

For the rest the track is quite short.

Hey! Great reply! You kick a** for taking the time to write this.

Sounds like your conclusion is the same as mine, the production could be alot better. I used Reason 1.0 to make it, I have like $0 for equipment...Do you have any suggestions for better tones/samples?

Also, is there a place where people have fun remixing tracks such as this...I'd love to hear what somebody with good production skills could do with my stuff. Oh yeah, and I know it's just a demo of the track, so that's why it be so short.

Well, I'm very new to creating this genre of music and I'd like to say thanks for the help.

___________________
Yes, I like to ruin perfectly good songs.
Yes, I know I have a problem.
No, I'm not going to do anything about it.

Rihanna - Please Don't Stop The Music (Sex Club Reject Remix)

<CART===LEMMY>

quote:

Originally posted by cartlemmy Hey! Great reply! You kick a** for taking the time to write this. Sounds like your conclusion is the same as mine, the production could be alot better. I used Reason 1.0 to make it, I have like $0 for equipment...Do you have any suggestions for better tones/samples?

You're welcome mate! a lot of people here on trance addict only seem to comment on tracks when they already know each other. It is very lame some times.

I do not work with reason so I can't really help you with tones/samples. I work with FL Studio and have a bunch of good VST's which help me a great deal in creating good sounding trance. And there are also numerous kick and perc samples you can download for free on the internet.

Keep up the work and keep being original en try to find someone who also works with Reason and who can perhaps help you spice up your sound!

well, sounds kinda how i did back in the day when i didn't really know how to make something that fit in a genre... You have some interesting sounds and some funky melodic progressions. The intrumentation does sound a bit on the cheap side. I like some of the synth sounds tho, and the melody before the very abrupt ending is good. You will get better with time I promise, also a resource that has really helped me is www.reasonstation.net - a virtual goldmine of refills, sounds, patches, and other reason users that are there to help.

Hope this helps, catalin.

Thanks Iloop, I will definatly check out that page.

I reposted the track with some of the modifications you suggested Nomen.
You think the changes are in the right direction? or worse? hehe.

My Mind

Again, I really appreciate the feedback, you guys are the best.

___________________
Yes, I like to ruin perfectly good songs.
Yes, I know I have a problem.
No, I'm not going to do anything about it.

Rihanna - Please Don't Stop The Music (Sex Club Reject Remix)

<CART===LEMMY>

I just realised when I uploaded the new version of the track I messed the link up...It should work now.

___________________
Yes, I like to ruin perfectly good songs.
Yes, I know I have a problem.
No, I'm not going to do anything about it.

Rihanna - Please Don't Stop The Music (Sex Club Reject Remix)

<CART===LEMMY>

well this isn't my style of music, but it sounds good.

i think it needs slightly more bass overall, especially on the bass-line itself.

i really like the way the track improvises though.

imo,

You do have a "new" fresh sound going on here.

Sound/production quality is really good.

Definitely could use a more powerful kick or add more punch to the one already on the track.

It is hard to categorize this track though, sorta sounds Dico-ish but not quite, its hard to explain...sometimes resembles Ferry's mix of Synaethesia.

-Kenidel Lopez

quote:

You do have a "new" fresh sound going on here. Sound/production quality is really good.

It is nice to hear that, seems with enough work I could make some decent tracks. I can't wait to get my hands on some better software/hardware. Reason 1 is a tad limiting.

___________________
Yes, I like to ruin perfectly good songs.
Yes, I know I have a problem.
No, I'm not going to do anything about it.

Rihanna - Please Don't Stop The Music (Sex Club Reject Remix)

<CART===LEMMY>

Heya, been a while since I contributed anything here but here goes.

I like this track definately worth a listen and definately worth a comentary.

As previous posters have stated there are some interesting progressions that take place.
It reminds me a little bit of a soundtrack (In a good way) with the types of melodies you have used.

My observation is that for my own taste I find the kick incredibly weak although am in two minds as to weather or not this would actually work with the song.
There is also no noteworthy bassline that gives it that dancable element so that would be a downer in my book.

I wouldn't worry too much about genre and the fact that you are capable of writing something that sounds original is a plus in my book so well done for that.

It could perhaps use a little variation but that's just my own preferance.
Good job though, keep up the good work.

Cheers
Nem

___________________
https://www.mixcloud.com/Calvin_Karass/

Nemesis, thank you for the in depth analysis.

quote:

I find the kick incredibly weak

I definatley will change the kick next time around

quote:

There is also no noteworthy bassline that gives it that dancable element so that would be a downer in my book.

Yeah, I've been workng on that. It has been hard to create a bassline that doesn't clash with the rest of the song.

quote:

It could perhaps use a little variation but that's just my own preferance.

Another good suggestion.

Thanks so much, the things you pointed out will help me in my next itteration of the song.

___________________
Yes, I like to ruin perfectly good songs.
Yes, I know I have a problem.
No, I'm not going to do anything about it.

Rihanna - Please Don't Stop The Music (Sex Club Reject Remix)

<CART===LEMMY>