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Posted by THE_Chris on May-23-2006 19:31:

Re: Help with my cover letter please

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Originally posted by BTG
I've never actually made a cover letter, and i'm hoping it would help me get a better job, but since i've never made one, i'm sure it could be done better. this is my first draft, probably could be more formal, so help out btg please.

cheers.

Without even reading the whole thing, I say that one golden rule is to cut down BIGTIME on the number of sentences beginning with "I". The first three sentences begin with "I", the first two with "I am". If I were a employer, I would dump your application as your grasp of the English language appears somewhat lacking.

Harsh, but true.

Posted by D-res on May-23-2006 19:31:

how are you applying?

might i suggest using monster.com?

i spent an hour compiling a good resume, never made a cover letter and i've gotten 3 solid job offers/interviews in the last week and i never sent my resume to anyone. they called me first. they're just like "hey im looking at your resume on monster and we want to meet with you."

i <3 teh internets

Posted by Sunsnail on May-23-2006 20:32:

quote:
Originally posted by BTG
what would i call 'building computers' as a potential position.

computer assembler

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