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-- Hey guys could i get some feedback on a tune
Hey guys could i get some feedback on a tune
As some of you know i started doing production in august of last year.... And this is my latest offering i need to do more sound design to fill up the tune but this is 2min worth... Im using vocal samples from a dfuse tune, which the name escapes me atm....
http://www.frozen-web.com/samples/xpanded.mp3
be as harsh as you want just dont be a dick about it lol....
the hell happened to MY song??
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| Originally posted by Highmay the hell happened to MY song?? |
use a better kick sample it sounds so muddy here, work on adding more percussion and effects maybe add a pad or some atmospheric stuff, its too minimal right now. The structure of the hihats are sloppy for some reason it sounds wrong. Otherwise good work, keep working at it. I like the vocals , is there any cahnce u can send it to me ?
peace,
Jay
Thats decent, good job
it's ok, not really my kind of music
I need a longer sample to judge 
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| Originally posted by fr0st well i got a new synth... And my lyric writing skills are utter shit as is all my english ability...... And i got inspired to do this instead... Sorry highmay you will have to live with just pictures from a silly cromagnon man such as myself. Me smash highshit.... |
Unfortunately, I don't know TOO many technical terms so my advice can help to an extent.
Vocals are great. The drumbeat that comes in around the :30 mark sounds great during the vocal part and during the short intervals between the vocals... but when there is a prolonged time between the vocals, such as at 1:30, it gets a bit annoying.
Otherwise, it's definitely a great start for a potentially awesome tune.
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| Originally posted by beema I need a longer sample to judge |
Only thing I can say is, it's too repetitive. Don't know how else to put it. 
its nice, but liven it up a little bit...have some chick in the background orgasming...that'll get peoples' attentions...
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| Originally posted by Highmay its nice, but liven it up a little bit...have some chick in the background orgasming...that'll get peoples' attentions... |
john, i think its good! i agree that maybe its a *little* too minimal, but it isnt really the kind of thing i normally listen to. it IS the kind of song i would chill too in my room late at night. but i think you can still add something to it that will make it a little more interesting.
but good job so far.
I don't get why the cymbal is in there. I think it needs to be taken out. Other than that, its good just needs a buildup of some sort.
hmm where to start
percs are kinda weak, kick is ugly. hats are kinda weird..pattern im not diggin. snare is kinda weak too. vocals are cut up nice,. bass could use more oomf. maybe add pad or another synth, its too minimal. id say nice start, its got potential but also needs alot of work.
Had about 30min today heres the latest ver a bit longer
http://www.frozen-web.com/samples/xpandered.mp3
Yes i know it needs more synths/effects.... But when i work i work from scratch with my synths thats half the fun, doing sound design that is.
This version has added drum fills and effects and some synth work...
not really fan of nething but the vocals.... the bass doesnt really flow with the vocals, those vocals have so much that can be done to them.... sorry to be brutally honest, but its a bit too minimal, i dont really like the beat at all, or the random little hats u added in there.... like i said, those vocals deserve MUCH more, who sung that btw? keep up the work though, i hope i didnt offend or nething, we all have different tastes..
you need to change something, it doesnt flow right...
maby make the bass line longer like 4 beats, sounds like it is 2?
It doesn't flow right, measure to measure.
maby that kick on the 1 is a little to strong.
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