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[Poetry] I Am

I found a poem that I liked and would like to share.

I'm not sure who wrote it, but the imagery is amazing.

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I am an incredible, joyous, wondrous & beautiful creation. An intriguing, fantastical, mystical, breathtaking & awesome fantasy. An explosive, powerful, frightening, intimidating creator. An intelligent, creative, talented & brilliant person. A bold, inquisitive, cheeky, infuriating child. A wise, calculating, patient & slow seer. A soft, sensual, enveloping & warm lover. An ugly, lonely, abandoned & mistreated victim. A cruel, uncaring, proud & selfish victor. A shining, bright, white light. A strong gust of wind, a star in the night sky, a night sky. A leaf, a tree, a ground, an air. A droplet of water, a wave, a river, a beach. A mirror, a house, a road, a car. A thought, a feeling, a touch. A vision, a dream, an illusion. A word, a sentence, a paragraph, a novel. An image, a film, a painting in oils. A worm, an antelope, a dolphin, an eagle. A hill, a valley, a mountain, a plain. An earth, a sun, a Saturn, a milky way. A song, a poem, a voice uplifted. An eye, a nose, a mouth, an ear. A hand, a foot, a body, a mind, a soul. A me, a you, a them, an us. I am

Deep.

Seems like a normal ******** post to me.

That was really bad.

No accounting for taste I guess.

you are...bi-polar!

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A me, a you, a them, an us.

i fucking hate poetry. shit's lame.

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Originally posted by tubularbills i fucking hate poetry. shit's lame.

Because? You can't grasp it?

As for the poem, it's borderline doggerel. If you want something deep, read Eliot or Williams.

so much depends upon a red wheelbarrow

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Originally posted by R.j. Because? You can't grasp it?

no, because its just feelings someone had and they wrote it down.

i write my feelings and emotions down all the time; but its not considered poetry

unless i write it

[EPIC PAUSE]

like

this.


and put space
s and phrase
s in like lame ass prose.

oh

and punctuation










.



/rant

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Originally posted by tubularbills no, because its just feelings someone had and they wrote it down. i write my feelings and emotions down all the time; but its not considered poetry unless i write it [EPIC PAUSE] like this. and put space s and phrase s in like lame ass prose. oh and punctuation . /rant

Well, you're just overreacting. I haven't come across something as ridiculous as this.

Yes, a lot of those modern poets use unorthodox syntax/technique/etc., and, I'll admit, it takes me a while to actually "get it" on my own (sometimes never), but some poems constructed in such a manner are done to recreate a sensation exactly as the poet envisioned. And, fyi, all poems "aren't" about somebody's feelings.

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Originally posted by tubularbills s in like lame ass prose.

ps. prose and verse are two different things.

whatever. there's nothing to "GET" about poetry.

and if there IS something to get about it, its just the poet's way of being a douchebag and giving the reader a runaround of what they're really trying to say.

kinda like when you ask a chick "what's wrong" and she says "oh, nothing"

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Originally posted by tubularbills whatever. there's nothing to "GET" about poetry. and if there IS something to get about it, its just the poet's way of being a douchebag and giving the reader a runaround of what they're really trying to say. kinda like when you ask a chick "what's wrong" and she says "oh, nothing"

Well, I disagree. It's the same damn thing everybody says when they're getting "the runaround." So:

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Originally posted by Meat187 Seems like a normal ******** post to me.

win right here

Aphrika anyone??

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Phenomenal Woman Pretty women wonder where my secret lies. I'm not cute or built to suit a fashion model's size But when I start to tell them, They think I'm telling lies. I say, It's in the reach of my arms The span of my hips, The stride of my step, The curl of my lips. I'm a woman Phenomenally. Phenomenal woman, That's me. I walk into a room Just as cool as you please, And to a man, The fellows stand or Fall down on their knees. Then they swarm around me, A hive of honey bees. I say, It's the fire in my eyes, And the flash of my teeth, The swing in my waist, And the joy in my feet. I'm a woman Phenomenally. Phenomenal woman, That's me. Men themselves have wondered What they see in me. They try so much But they can't touch My inner mystery. When I try to show them They say they still can't see. I say, It's in the arch of my back, The sun of my smile, The ride of my breasts, The grace of my style. I'm a woman Phenomenally. Phenomenal woman, That's me. Now you understand Just why my head's not bowed. I don't shout or jump about Or have to talk real loud. When you see me passing It ought to make you proud. I say, It's in the click of my heels, The bend of my hair, the palm of my hand, The need of my care, 'Cause I'm a woman Phenomenally. Phenomenal woman, That's me. Maya Angelou

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Originally posted by tubularbills whatever. there's nothing to "GET" about poetry. and if there IS something to get about it, its just the poet's way of being a douchebag and giving the reader a runaround of what they're really trying to say. kinda like when you ask a chick "what's wrong" and she says "oh, nothing"

the poet camouflages the message so only those who can relate will be able to acknowledge it.

my post right there can be considered poetry. fucking beautiful woo wooooo woooo

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Originally posted by hundred the poet camouflages the message so only those who can relate will be able to acknowledge it. my post right there can be considered poetry. fucking beautiful woo wooooo woooo

still lame. i dunno, never been a fan of poetry in general. whatev.

you should take shrooms instead of that beer

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Originally posted by MrJiveBoJingles That was really bad. No accounting for taste I guess.

Yup.

A random collection of adjectives and pronouns doesn't make a poem.

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Originally posted by Domesticated Yup. A random collection of adjectives and pronouns doesn't make a poem.

Have any favorite poets?

HIP HOP.

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Originally posted by MrJiveBoJingles Have any favorite poets?

As a rule I don't like poetry much, though I have studied it a few times. For me, poetry is like art: I can't name any specific names, but I know what I like. I'm more interested in prose.

When my Grandma was alive she used to recite this and I've always liked it:

When you get what you want in your struggle for self,
And the world makes you King for a day,
Then go to the mirror and look at yourself
And see what that man has to say.

For it isn't a man's father, mother or wife
Whose judgment upon him must pass,
The fellow whose verdict counts most in life
Is the man staring back from the glass.

He's the fellow to please, never mind all the rest.
For he's with you clear up to the end,
And you've passed your most dangerous, difficult test
If the man in the glass is your friend.

You can fool the whole world down the pathway of years
And get pats on the back as you pass,
But your final reward will be heartache and tears
If you've cheated the man in the glass.

poems are dumb. So you can rhyme, big deal. Can you flow? Can you make the club bump with your insightful thoughts? No, you can't, you couldn't, and you never will. This was the biggest problem I had with Dante's Divine Comedy. You're sitting there in class with the assignment to interpret the glorious nature of the art, yet you're dumbfounded by the lack of a decent stereo system to rap to. It doesn't sound like an acapella and there were no instructions on how to properly apply it to a real work of art. All it does is rhyme. Poetry, yeah, 50 Cent must be among the ranks of the greatest poets in history.

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Originally posted by tubularbills whatever. there's nothing to "GET" about poetry. and if there IS something to get about it, its just the poet's way of being a douchebag and giving the reader a runaround of what they're really trying to say. kinda like when you ask a chick "what's wrong" and she says "oh, nothing"

this...

Half the time, I don't even know what the fuck the poet is talking about. Example, Shakespeare. When we had to read this in high school, we always waited for the teacher to tell us what the bloody fuck he was talking about.

Shakespeare requires a greater attention span than that of a goldfish, making him meaningless to most of today's mentally stunted generation.

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I'm not smart enough to understand what's written in text X without further explanation. Other people can and enjoy text X. THEREFORE The guy that wrote text X is an idiot OR there is something wrong with his form of expression AND the people that like text X are also stupid for liking it.

For extra points , who can spot the error in logic/reasoning?


PS - I think that poem was rubbish.

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