i think this post fits better in the music production section,

___________________
www.soundcloud.com/rinster

no...

I want opinion from skilled composers...not anyone...you get it???

and this is just a draft as I said...

that¨s why it's here...


and btw...you meant music producers promotion board, yea?

___________________
Help me make soundtrack for my grandpa´s art exhibition:
Check out my topic about it here
Thank you!

Fatten up the sound and you'll be more confident to finish the track.

I think the sounds are a bit sterile, they need some more space to them, more effects and a bit of unison to the lead could to the trick
Bassline is pretty nice, but I think it also needs a driving sub-bass (in the freq. range below the bassline you currently have).

What I do when I'm "stuck" with a track is that I create a bunch of new sounds that fit into it, create melodies, basslines and new drum patterns and try mixing them into the track in various places. That way, I have more material to build from, even though I don't use it all.

I don't feel stuck with this track only...but producing/writing as a whole

thanks for your comment...I'm about to add effects etc...what I wanted more was composition advice (like how's the progression, chords...)

___________________
Help me make soundtrack for my grandpa´s art exhibition:
Check out my topic about it here
Thank you!