Just finished this one up.. it has a great breakdown but i'm not sure of the intro.. need some feedback on the intro as well as general feedback..

Armana - Mark One

192Kbps Bitrate
6min 37sec total runtime

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Last edited by alanzo on Jul-15-2004 at 01:08

Comments as I listen.

Like the bass alot, very much my kinda style.
Could use a sub bass?

That low pass could use a bit of work when that first lead comes in.

Lead sounds great.

Pad could come in a little more subtly. Main lead sounds awesome. The crash is kinda week in the break. and the snare roll could be a bit harder.

The pad seems to be conflicting with the lead a bit, maybe bring her up an octave?

Overall quality is very high. Nice and clean. Send me your final version when it's done Alan!

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I will describe this, as you described BT. Cheese.
And crappy cheese.
The sounds are all week. Esp. the bassdrum and clap. The bass is muffled and doesnt work with the bassdrum.
And what the heck did you use dialup those leads with. Vanguard ?
The "melody", a week, forgettable, going nowhere, random arp that becomes boring at the first bar.
Where is the great breakdown ?
And try mix and master on anything else than your pc-speaker.

Nice try, but not.

thanks for the comments cryo

I confused BT with BK (which is total cheese)

BT is a production god

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Last edited by alanzo on Jul-14-2004 at 20:43

the intro FX are great
not sure about the bass and the percussion, I think the bass and kickdrum drownes the percussions.. and the melody,
but the melody does sound indeed very good..
some small adjustments on the kick/bass or the kick or the bass will do good
the breakdown is good, a little muddy but still very good, the main lead is very good.. z3ta+ for the lead??

your bassline sounds like the original of Blank & Jones - Flowtation, even in the notes... after the breakdown the percussions drownes totally, and I think u need to swith the kickdrum, it is too sub-like, and doesnt go very well with the bass..

but the melody is excellent I think...

keep it up!

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Originally posted by Subtle lead is very good.. z3ta+ for the lead??

nearly all of the sounds including the leads came from my virus..

thanks for all the comments everyone, especially your's cryo! *gives cryogenic a big hug*

I'll work on everything and upload a new version in a day or so..

MORE FEEDBACK WOULD BE APPRECIATED

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Listening...

- I really enjoyed the fx you have for your intro, but the kick, as mentioned previously, needs to be changed/eq'd/etc.
- The phased perc you introduce at 00:40 is cool, but is carried on for a bit to long.
- Hi hat sounds beautiful, along with the clap.
- FX faded in at 1:30 is nice. Along with the lead coming in now.
- B.U. at 2:00 sounds awesome.
- The melody at 2:30 is beautiful. The pad here was said to be a bit strong, but I rather like it.
- The melody that fades in at 3:05, I really do not like. The melody itself doesn't catch my attention.
- 3:39, Bassline sounds awesome. Nothing to change here.
- I love that pause at 4:07.
- The melody, as mentioned before, doesn't catch my attention, but not only that...it plays on for way too long. by 5:20-ish it gets very repetative. This melody fades in at 3:10 and plays till 6:20. It continously plays for 3min, and 10sec. I personally think that is way to long for the main lead to be played at. I think it should be repeated about 4 times over, maybe 6 if something is dramtically changed in the track, but not a lot is changed in this 3min.

The bassline, hi hat, and claps are perfect. The melody at 2:30 is beautiful and shouldn't be put to waste. It should be incorporated in the track later on. The main lead, as mentioned plays for too long, and gets very repetative. If the melody is to be played, something has to be added to the track so it doesn't become repetative. The kick needs to be changed as well. The FX's used throughout the track are also perfect. In relative to your other productions, this track can be improved on. You've made better productions. I do not think your talents are reflected very much in this track, but overall, the track is alright.

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i dont want to be like the most of the people that replied with bashing comments...

But most of it is true...i didnt like the melody...but i did love the sound at 2 minz...if i have access to this track...i would gut everything out...and focus on those sounds at 2 minz

Gl man...dont give up

Sebastiano

I re-uploaded a new version of this track and took into consideration most of the comments.. please tell me if it you spot anything else or if something still isn't right..

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Hello their alanzo

Intro is nice and smoothly comes in, melody at 3:10 is nice although it is a bit simple, and could use some work.

4:07 I like the pause, but when it start's up again... something seems to kick in too quickly and doesnt give it that "SMOOTH" transition I was expecting.

Overall track is good, could use some more eqing and such on kick and overall instruments.

Like has been said before the melody gets way to repetitive from 4 mins until 6ish.. try something dif with it, it gets boring.

Good job though, definitely an improvement, keep it up!

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Last edited by midaV on Jul-15-2004 at 00:28

after hearing aramana, i wasn't such a fan of your style, was to fast and a bit of synth violence.

now, this starts nice, great sound balances, and a nice uplifting riff in the intro.

i do find the kick a bit weak, and the bass could be more thunderous if you know what i mean. it needs an agressive subbass.

the break wasn' that special, could add more stuff to it, also few fx or different layers on the intro wouldn't hurt.

but as everyone said, it's a good improvement.

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Nice track, I really like the way it sounds.