Your buildup to 2.40 is nice, but kinda long to me.
ooh...i like the part starting @ 2.40mins!...and the way it builds up and where it seems like the beats are fighting to be heard. The contrasts are nice...and now i feel like im moving.
you break off the flow @ 4.30ish and it sounds like it's leading nowhere, but then you stop and i thought it was about to end but then you come back with another funky beat @ 5.35, and it sounds crazy. i like it here.
you have a couple of elements going on, and you utilize the melody in different ways.
all in all...i like the 3min section. really brought the mood up.
good job
cheers! rex.
Sep-25-2004 04:11
suneel
Senior tranceaddict
Registered: Jan 2004
Location: Chicago
great, finally i got a response after 4 days!! thanks for your views blayzinyo and the detailed reply. so u liked the last 3 mins best?
i had no idea that the build up was kind of long. the part from 5:35 is a repeat of the starting tune. kind of progressive. anyways i appreciate that you could spend some time on the track.
peace
suneel
Sep-25-2004 04:50
nectario
Senior tranceaddict
Registered: Nov 2003
Location: New Jersey, United States
Hi Sunneal
Ok here we go,
1. Inital Pad sounds great
2. Kick is nice but sounds a bit too blury for my taste. Hard to explain..
3. I like many of the synths you're using. Baseline synths especially
4. I don't like the snare (in the beginning). Sounds weak maybe? How about compressing it or equing it more...
5. I like the breakdown.. and generally after the breakdown I like it more. Sounds more balanced. But yes last three minutes I like more.
5. At 2:11 the synth that comes in is louder than expected. Maybe you can adjust the level so it gradually goes to that level
6. The dark baseline is great! I like it...
Generally it's a good piece...
Keep it up! :-)
Good luck,
-Nektarios
Sep-25-2004 19:35
suneel
Senior tranceaddict
Registered: Jan 2004
Location: Chicago
Nektarios ,thanks man. liked the dark bassnine ? FM7 did the trick Synth at 2:11 too loud? i wanted to change the flow there, thats why. probably could reduce it wee-bit. ya i feel that the snare and the kick needs to be re-worked. maybe make the kick more punchy and the snare more defined. kind of missed that out. thanks for bringing it up!
peace
suneel
Sep-25-2004 20:49
nectario
Senior tranceaddict
Registered: Nov 2003
Location: New Jersey, United States
No problem. Any time. Well the level at 2:11 can be left the same if you maybe fade it in at that level so it does not come in too sudden...
Anyway, good luck!
-Nektarios
Sep-25-2004 21:04
djkoolaide
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Jul 2004
Location:
One of your synths has some mega portamento going on... almost sounds like it wasn't meant to be like that. If it was, I apologize
Sep-26-2004 02:32
suneel
Senior tranceaddict
Registered: Jan 2004
Location: Chicago
portamento is off on the synths. could you tell me where exactly you felt out of tune djkoolaide?
Sep-26-2004 04:18
d-miurge
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: Unicornland
Nice work guy, it's original !
I agree with nectario, your synth coming at 2.11 is a bit louder.
I think too that your drums can be improved, add some percs, like shaker, openhat, clap (or snare), because it's a bit "light" with just a kick and one hat, your track will be more dynamic with some other rythms, because your synths are good and this track has a great potential...
Cheers !
D-Miurge
Sep-26-2004 11:01
EtherealSL
experiments underway
Registered: Sep 2003
Location: Washington D.C.
120 seems really really slow to my tastes
bump that up to at least 135 or 140
i do like that bassline, very dirty and grungy, that's how i like it
The portamento synth sounds a little off but the gated saw that comes in sounds pretty cool. you need to raise your kick levels to add more punch into it. layer a little more to keep the track interesting. keep presenting something new, a little submelody or whatnot.