I like everything except for the whitenoise that appears sometimes

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I can't hear the hihats. I agree with the white noise problem. The pause between pulling the kick drum out and droping it back seemed too long without any build up. I kept wondering where the track was going. I would use your main energetic parts as your intro and finish and cut the beginning and end off and add something more in the middle.
I'd start with those issues.
I like the melody, but I agree with you that it does need some mastering.
hope that helps.
please repost once you've reworked it a bit, I'd like to hear it again.

This sound reminds me of my earlier songs. I call it lack of attention to detail, as obviously tons of parts here aren't finished yet. The subtle transisitons need some work. I would say the arrangement and structure would be the only things to critize, as your sounds to together pretty well.

I mean, its obviously that you need some filler in this track all over the place.

Thanks for the feedback guys, it helps out a great deal. At least I know I'm on the right track with some things. I'm going to tweak the arrangement, add some stuff and upload an updated version as soon as my new headphones come in. One question though, do you guys think additional FX and synths would help fill the track out?

Hey man i like the pads and the chilled melody in the breakdown infact its wicked as I listen to it more. I like the way it carrys on into the rest of the tune. Its quite a dark track, but you could do with some more perc's in it an dth clap is too quiet & the kick needs to be a bit sharper.

i like the way the track is going...it seems empty thats all...it needs something in there to build it up...

thats it i think...

Thanks for the feedback guys, I appreciate all the comments. Now, I just gotta get my new Sony headphones in so I can continue work on it.