nice job ...it has some great elements ...maybe work on the hook more ...it needs a good melody otherwise it sound good ....your production skills are good it just needs something to make it stand out more...keep up the good work !

Hey thanks man...I tried to incorporate a good melody in it but I guess its lacking some energy to drive it...do you have a soundcloud or anything? I'd like to listen to your tracks since you took the time to listen to mine Thanks

Cheers - Robert

your kick has the majority of the bass appearing after the beat which is slowing the track down a lot - those kind of bass drums really only work if you match the tempo of the track to the bass drum, which is very hard. i really only discovered this problem in my mixes recently and it's made the world of difference and is probably the best bit of advice I can share on here.

melodys and breaks are good, it sounds better in the bits with no bass drum I think and is a little pumpy for my taste, try a multi-band compressor with sidechain and don't sidechain the mids and highs so much and the track will sit together better.

this is the closest I've heard on here for a while to a releasable track (up to and including the breakdown)

ok - hypercritical mode:

the glassy piano isn't quite right and has no dynamics.. just get rid of it and start the break with half the pad build and then right into the plucks. i'm a fine one to talk in my Optik alia as I love a long breakdown, but imagine the dancefloor standing there for that long

section through 5 mins is almost good, but it doesn't start right, try cutting the 8 bar pattern in half and starting with the second half and then the first.. it may work.

this bit also needs some work on the bass and percs.

I'm not sure why it needs the new melody bit at all (after the break) why not build on those plucks a little more.

almost there but that last 10% is by far the hardest bit! good luck

T

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Thanks for the feedback! Sorry I didn't respond sooner, been busy on a school trip. Everything you said makes sense and I can hear that now, but I'm not sure I understand what you mean by the bass trailing too late after the kick, care to go more in detail? It could just be the sidechain, I don't know. The track sounds really pumpy because I had to use a limiter on the master channel to boost the overall volume of the mix.
The piano did have some more dynamics before the limiting, but I agree that the timbre doesn't fit the rest of the track. I really need to work on my mixing and my own sounds...a lot of what you hear are tweaked presets because my synthesis isn't great. I think I'm done with this track but I'll keep everything you said in mind for the next one! I hope to have a good track for a release in the future, it just takes time and I don't have a great setup right now for producing.

Thanks again,
Rob