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Ok. there are some problems with this tune, but I think it could be a lot better with some easy modifications.

First of all, the sound at 1:37 is pretty annoying. But I think that can be fixed either by lowering it an octave, or by cutting a big portion of the highs/mids. You could try. The problem is that it’s outside of the sound image, stands out to much.

The next thing. The sound at 2:00 is misplaced, the timing is wrong. If you could move it, so it starts earlier, and sort of washes over the kick I think it could work quite well. Just some ticks to the left, in other words. Anyhow, it needs to work better together with the kick and bass.

As a matter of fact, I think you have some timing issues in general, I would have that in mind in the future if I were you. It is important with milliseconds, one tick to early or late will make a big difference.

Would be interesting to hear a new version were you taken care of this, I think it could be good with some additional work. It has potential!

Edit: It's the same problem with the melody in the intro. It comes just a tad to late in relation to the other sound.