Well first off - your mastering is terrible.. it completly lacks clarity and power... try using a compressor on your next track and cutting all frequencies above 17,000hz with a paragraphic Eq.. that's about what I did to remaster this track and listen to the difference! (Download Remaster Here)

As for your over all composition.. the placement of the kick isn't too great in some parts.. like at 4:52.. work on your percussion and mastering skills and you'll have some good stuff!

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alanzo --> thx a lot for comment!!! yeah you have right, your mastering sound a lot better!

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Hi !
The main idea is very nice, however, you should use some extra hihats, cause it sounds very "slow". Piano is cool, such is the break. the bass and the melody afterwards dont fit together. Oh and the melody needs to develop abit more if you ask me.

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