A nice little melody going on there.
Not being too experienced it would be hard for me to say anything of real value but I would say that the thing you may want to ditch is the raspy sound that comes in at 2:28ish. Perhaps also sort out a few levels as it's very in your face (Not necessarlily a bad thing).

Nice work though.

Cheers
Nem

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Comments as I listen:

Very in your face right from the start, I really like the percussions.

Bassline could use some work, sounds sort of weak.

Pretty nice melody at the 1 minute mark.

I like that synth at 2:30ish personally, but it sounds a little too detuned I think.

Overall this is pretty nice and has some potential; good work.

Bass is way too dull.
I think the kick is a little muffled too.
Love the riff coming in at 1:00
Piano is really nice.
I kinda think your closed hats are a little too loud.
Very nice tune. Name suits it.

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thx a lot guys

when you call it 'right in your face', then that's exactly what I wanted ....got too much energy these days, kinda reflects my mood

And yeah....basslines...I know...my big problem . I try to compensate it with percussions, but it's not the same. Gotta get some tutorials on it.

The synth at 2:30...this part of the track was too weak and too empty without it. I know it may sound misplaced but I added it as a contrast to the rest.

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own tracks
ELE - Safari 2004

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Rank 1 - Airwave (ELE Remix)

kick could be stronger

bass is nice.. but it needs some work too get stronger.. abit too weak now

and i think the melodie sounds too happy for the rest.. hehe
was expecting something more darker.. but that's me.. heh

but keep working on it

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