Liking the pads at the start, very atmospheric.

Percs are OK, beef up that kick a bit. Try and introduce some more complex patterns to create more interest. The bass is thin and gets a bit irritating, perhaps change it for a deeper more sub-bass sound.

Love the filtering work.. works well.

The pads in the break are nice, maybe make them a little louder.

As the lead comes in I like the ambience there. Might wanna beef up that lead a little, with say, some more synths to form the sound. Just sounds a little thin.

When it all kicks off though it sounds a little messy though, seems a bit of a clash of notes.

That other synth that comes in sounds a little too fruityloops (correct me if I'm wrong ) but what you do with it sounds nice.

Good overall structure for the track. Not bad at all. Keep it up.

I like the overall feel to this track, nice progression and atmosphere. Agree that you need more sub-bass, esp where it's used in the breakdown. Perc does sound good and with a deeper bassline the two should gel quite well. Might want some more hats though, a decent offbeat open hat and some more interesting closed hats should bring the whole thing to life.

Play with some effects on the lead synth to give it a little more warmth, look at things like reverb, resonance and flangers. Not such a fan of the pads myself, personal opinion but it seems i'm alone on this!

Enjoyed listening to this one, Keep it at.

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Thanks for the comments people. Hopefully my next track should be better. I will be posting it next week.

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Originally posted by timyagan Thanks for the comments people. Hopefully my next track should be better. I will be posting it next week. Regards Tim Yagan

i was going to listen to it but that link is not working... fyi..

- musashi

Hey there everybody.

Im sorry about the link.. Its not dead, its just tripod and their daily download limitations....shitty!

Anyways, if it doesnt download, just wait a while and try again later.

Please download this one, as i would appreciate feedback on it.

Kind Regards
Tim Yagan

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Hey there everyone. The sites up again, sorry about the problem

Cheers
Tim Yagan

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