hey everyone.
this is my first track. its not done, i still need to put an ending to it but its 4:20, so its a good start. please comment on it becuase i could use all the advice if it sucks. i think its pretty good for my first try, and especially since i just turned 16 a couple weeks ago, so im still learnin.

give it a listenhere

it might not work since its on soundclick.com, so if it doesn't work then go here
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/3/davidfranzmusic.htm and just click on mp3. thanks

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Am downloading now, and will listen to and review later, after I've been to the pub.

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It's good for being a first try, but there is something missing i think. The song has no spirit at all, and the percussion/drums seem a little to simple for me. I miss the soft feeling in it.

When making a good track, make sure you can play it loud. this one can't be played loud, try make some changes so it won't hurt your ears when listening to it. Anyway it's a good start, the strings in the background are a little too 'easy' but in a beginners perspective it's not that bad.

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Originally posted by M1cro5lave It's good for being a first try, but there is something missing i think. The song has no spirit at all, and the percussion/drums seem a little to simple for me. I miss the soft feeling in it. When making a good track, make sure you can play it loud. this one can't be played loud, try make some changes so it won't hurt your ears when listening to it. Anyway it's a good start, the strings in the background are a little too 'easy' but in a beginners perspective it's not that bad.

thanks for the comment.

things are a little simple, i know. i need to figure out how to make it more filled up and give it some life, especially percussion and synths. i think the melody at the end is good enough to work with and ill add something more to it.

any other comments are appreciated

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Nice fx @ the beginning. Interesting distorted guitar sound you got going there. Quite a unique sound. Bass is off tho.

Rest of the track is quite abnormal. You got sum gud ideas tho, just need to develop the gud (guitars and fx) and get rid off the bad (everything else).

Try and come up with a melody, sumthing to bob your head to.

Keep it up tho, practice makes progress.

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