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that sound at the begining is a bit loud i think, and im not sure if the kick and clap suit the track. Also, the progression sounds a bit strange to me, like it suddenly jumps from one section to another, maybe thats the idea, i duno. It just hard to know when we reach the end of the phrase. Lead and pad that come in are nice, but i think bass is quite important, especially in that bit. Perhaps would have worked better as a breakbeat or ambient track, because when the beat starts, it doesnt really fit the ordinary 8 bar phrase structure that it aught to, and thats a bit off putting and strange to me somehow, i cant tell how many bars there are in the phrase, but its not 8 i dont think ,and its not a multiple of 8. Where the phrases end and a new part is introducd or old part lost, like the pad at 3:29, some filter envelopes or fading the volume on the pad mite work well, just to make it smoother, i dont like the bits between 3:51 and 3:54, i think it sounds a bit random and irrelevant. Onto the piano, it could be nice but there are some key clashes which ruin it i think, perhaps put the piano up and octave so you can hear where they sound muddy. It has potential, but i think the phrases are the most confusing thing, ireally cant tell when one starts and ends some times, and i think changing this and restructuring it slightly would make it alot easier to follow, also try and make the phrase transistions a bit nicer so that the song doesnt go straight from one phrase to another. Nice emotion and feel to the track generally, just try some of those things and i think it would be a big improvement. That piano i really think needs sorting out. 
Hope this is constructive and that you feel inspired to continue working on the track, ull have a very nice finished project 
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