You've used the 'release'-function very much, haven't you? I'd put it more on the background, tho. You also should have given it more sfx like reverbs. The rhythm is just o.k, but you need to get better structure in the track.
The second fragment doesn't play

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Originally posted by ******** ha! as if any fragment plays!!! I was just coming back to delete these tracks as the day after effect has kicked in and I'm like my gawd was this listenable yesterday. yah I was going to put a vocal segment but I was too lazy to hook the mixer/mic up to sample then it sorta went off on a new tangent I enjoyed writting the first part second part isn't so much my feeling. I sorta had a sunrise fxs in my mind but I didn't expand or apply dynamics processing to it.. which might give it a much fuller sound. the rythm is almost non existance also some low tones arn't there yah Im often mooved by compulsion to action and for some reason I posted to this seection of the tranceaddict forums THEN after that... well force of habit music time goes allot faster for me.. and my tracks sound so chintz instramentally compared to other releases on this "amateur board" . I' like aroud the 5 minute mark but its gets so "gay" although with some different instramentation its gets very floaty the 4/4 kick is sooo old need to work on percussion sampling I LOve the end of this though its perhaps more acid techno.. awsome near the end imo hence the repeat at 6:20 etc.. etc.. etc..

Is that supposed to be honest about yourself?
Come on, it isn't all that bad. It's truely original and imaginative! Ya just need to work on the details