It's too slow, sounds nice though, but maybe some layering on the synth would be a little nice.

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Before I answer, what exactly is it that you were going for? It helps to have a point of reference when critiquing work.

i was going for an uplifting melody with a nice buildup in the end, i know it needs work but some comments would be nice.

Yeah, it's waaay too slow. There are some timing errors in there too, making it sound very clumsy.

Your reverb settings are quite weird too, sounds like it was recorded in an empty hall.

I don't suppose you could put the midi (or RNS if this is Reason work) of this up? I'd like to try out something if you don't mind.

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Yes in that case it's far too slow, and as Mr. Mystery said there are timing errors. If it was intentional, then you should make the errors more prominent to really fuck with the listener, otherwise fix it.

deff needs to sped up big time and reverb needs to be cute down big time try adding more delay insted of delay

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Ok, here we go:

- Too slow (speed it up, as said)
- Reverb sounds to 'icey' and dry, needs to be a bit warmer (try eq-ing out some of the highs and adding a bit more low, or make it shorter)
- Timing is not right, some notes just seem to fall out of place
- A bit of delay would do nice, gives a bit more of a 'spacy' feel

Overall, it is a nice sounding synth, just needs some tweaking here and there.

LOL tranceSPEEDER with too SLOW melody

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As people have said: Too slow and the timing is wrong.

I took your melody and made my own version of it. Hope you don't mind.

Sample: http://www.lnctv.com/~a41154a/samples/melody.mp3

Changes:

- Tempo changed to 138 bpm.
- Added a few notes.
- Added delay
- Fixed the timing.

Hope you'll like it.

Last edited by Danne__85 on Oct-20-2004 at 18:29

hey thats kewl! can i have the file for that?

What program are you using?