I don't like the beginning of it at all, it just doesn't sound right imo. The second synth sounds much better... nice!!! You better start working on that kick asap! There's a synth which doesn't sound right, it seems to me that you pressed an extra key.
The track ended when I was least expecting it.

You have some really nice things going on, however it needs more work.
IMO
Cheers

___________________
Official Release Alekos TA Mac OS X Menubar

Cogito, ergo sum.
Your imagination is only the beginning
Bogota Distrito Capital - Millos
Forza Milan

Totally agree with IKKI-ZUVK about the first synth - it sounds like my midi mapper when I import a midi file into cubase.

I dont like the leads at all - just sounds like a lot of noise IMO.
Think all the levels are too high- im listening on headphones and everything sounds way to loud.
Very basic IMO, and everything seems to clash - needs mastering and lot of work with leads and things. Havent heard the original so cant comment on how your version varies though.

Sorry if it all seems to be negative, you may get better comments because atfr all this is just my opinion.
Keep going though!!!

and oh yes - it just STOPS!

MP