I'm going to change the electric wierd sounding guitars to more acoustic ones instead (I guess they sound the best in the hans zimmer guitars sample cd), remove the intro and start at 1 min mark, remove the voice, and do some tweaks on the main melody part.
I think the part at 4:50 is good tho

What do you guys think?

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you have a full sound but it aint my thing. the track sounds like its trying to be too generic. with loads of 'textbook' sounding elements. i like the beat and some of the effects/bassy synths and would rebuild a more sophisticated track around this if i were you. the bass/beat/effects do have some mileage.

the vocal and guitar melodys are really cheesy.

i would play around with using different synth sounds and bin the guitar. just because it sounds like a synth trying to be a guitar. and not a real guitar. also the guitar doesnt really suit this type of trance.

production wise it sounds clean but as i read you are using samples of melodies(the guitar) in my opinion you should try writing your own around the bassline. prerecorded sample cd's limit your creativity if they are anything more than bass notes/drums and effects imo.

rich

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Cool, some good feedback there.

The sample cd is akai, that I use with a sampler. So I have loads of velocities and different sounds there, so it doens't limit the creativity that much. But the acoustic guitars sound a lot better though.

All bass and synth sounds are from the Nordlead 3 and Virus C.

Yep, the voice is gonna take a hike.

I think it might sound cool with some acoustic plucks though.
I'm going to ditch the guitars in the main melody part, only I'm going to replace the guitars with vocals from Tiff Lacey instead (if she's up for another one that is).

Thanks rich

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