well i agree with everything said so far. Except for the professional sound needing better equipment. I think you would need to work better on your mastering techniques on this one (god knows i hate doing that on mine). But its a hard work that enhances the sound to pro quality. Try to raise the high frequencies a little. They seem kinda sunked. I think more than that you need a little more variety in your perccussions and in my opinion you shouldnt let these different stages in your song go for so long. Cut down on the time, i think. I really liked the uncertain atmosphere in your track, and if it is in your taste, i would tray making this a goa track.

PS: if you have time... check my latest song Grey River if you have some time thanks.