Nice intro.
The vocals doesn't well.
The kick is weak.
Nice fx. The percs are cool.
You repeated the intro on the track itself and it doesn't create atmosphere. You are also reusing the same fxes.
The 303 is ok.
Where is the bassline?
Are you fuckin kiddin me? This is really lofi.
Give me a better version.
This is not really spacy or psychodelic. Try to make more fxes, more hmm cybernetika will explain it better hehe.
It lacks atmosphere & variation.

I won't grade it just because you didn't put higher quility but this is poor.
Sorry for being harsh but you need critics.

Omer.

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Hey
commenting as I listen...
really nice intro, good synths. And some nice FX.
The percussion in the intro work very well.
Till 1:10 this sounds very nice. After that you should throw in a heavier bass for full force. I think this will work well with a track like this. In any case you need to boost the kick and make the bassline present. Maybe you should consider to remove the flanger on the beat on that point and let the clean perc sound "speak".
The 303 is quite nice, I like it, good sound.
There is a small break at 2:10 but nothing really changes. I was expecting something else, instead all stays the same. Maybe add another element and change the acidline.
Like the Darkone said, it is lacking the spaciness. If you want to make the track spacy, throw in more atmospheric sounds.
It sounds like a solid fundament to start with. Keep on working on it

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very poor quaility

hard to judge sounds and levels

this is more tech trance than psy

sounds like ultra sonic

cant make much comment on it due to the poor quality sorry mate

its not 160kbps its 59 kbps

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wow, thanks guys for being honest! now i know atleast what to do to make the track sound better! im gonna change the track later, ill take all the comments in consideration,

thank cybernetika & folks.


bidor

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the intro is nice, kick is to low for me... seems as its to low for everyone sub kick ftw! bassline is where? me wants bassline?!

the acid lines are nice, but the track gets repetetive for me.. to repetetive! cool fx

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thanks dj cola! i have been adding fx effects, and it has a bassline now wich i forgot... im trying to make it more spacy but its quite hard

bidor

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Nice acid in the opening.

Too much kick. It's causing a lot of clipping.

You're favoring the right side too much, methinks.

That techy lead doesn't seem to have any rhythmic definition. It feels random. You might want to work on that.

This track is very top-heavy. It could some more power in the mids and low end. You can also turn your hats down. highs can be pretty quiet and still be heard; your ears are unbelievable easy to fool.

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Didnt quite like this one as much as your previous tracks. Theres some interesting elements, but it just didnt hold my attention. The mix quality needs some work too. I think you should spend more time on getting the mixdown just right before you go nuts with fx.

Keep at it!

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Intro could have some pads or fx added to it.

The phasing hihats are great. They are the loudest layer in the mix.

Sweet acid bass layer.

IMO I recommend to do the following:
-The bass drum is low range but sounds to be clipping. Reconsider your bass drum selection. Listen to one of Cybernetikas tracks for reference & comparison. play around abit.
-Centralise the acid bass line & add a bassier layer.
-turn down the hihats or turn up the rest of the mix.
-add some more fx for sure!
-The high synth layer pattern is random & clipping.
-The structure could be modified. Try & progress the tune with some new layering (start -> middle -> interlude -> end.). You could even suprise us with a new interesting pattern layer for the finale or something. Just an idea anway.

Best of luck mate. It definitely has potential.

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thanks for all the great reviews guys! im working on the track, its harder then i thought it would be.. i found some other fx sounds and basslines on some cd's that were lieing in my room, so im gonna work on that. i have to work today though so hopefully when im home tonight ill finish the track, thats when im in a good mood, ill take all the comment into consideration, and thanks again for the reviews! much appreciated.

bidor.

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Originally posted by bidor thanks for all the great reviews guys! im working on the track, its harder then i thought it would be.. i found some other fx sounds and basslines on some cd's that were lieing in my room, so im gonna work on that. i have to work today though so hopefully when im home tonight ill finish the track, thats when im in a good mood, ill take all the comment into consideration, and thanks again for the reviews! much appreciated. bidor.

I look forward to hearing the final tune then mate

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