hey guys

im about 90% complete on this track now, but i still feel its lacking something but I can't quite put my finger on it. Please have a listen and tell me what you think.

DIMENSION OF LIGHT

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Nice Intro. Dont like the kick, seems a bit tacky. nice percussion, sounds like it belongs in a film mate. Send it off to film companies. Lovely strings, saw is a bit weak. Definetly belongs in a film.

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its kinda funny cause when i start writing this I was trying make a club track, then I ended up with those strings and choir type feel you would find in a movie soundtrack lol.

this was the first song that i've written where i had the lead/melody before i had anything else written yet.

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its kinda funny cause when i start writing this I was trying make a club track, then I ended up with those strings and choir type feel you would find in a movie soundtrack lol.

this was the first song that i've written where i had the lead/melody before i had anything else written yet.

edit: damn double post -.-

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hey there .
the intro feels documentary like, some kind of how life began documentary .

i dont like the crash you used to start the full beat with.
bassline is a bit odd, has an electro feel to it.

percs feels kind off irregular.
i think the strings are 2 loud in the mix.

and that gated thing in the back is 2 subtle.
your synth in the break seems to pan to the right and then back to the middle?

i kinda like that metallic saw you used.

or whatever it is .

you got some nice ideas in here.

nice track but it feels a bit repetetive and well the other stuff i mentioned above. keep working

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nice ambience to it. nice rise of the kick and bass. now i know you were trying to make something new with the hihats but.. they sound really off. those cymably like open hihats i think you should reduce the velocity or vol of each first hh at each step. at 015o... they way the pad comes in is bad. you should intoduce it slower. its too abrupt.

0230 i already wanted to hear some medium pitched leads. the melody is starting to wear off its beauty.

0340 do that like 30 sec or 40 secs ago. that is nice... and dont add the pads to it later on. just leav it in with the bass ...

this song for it to be a little more intrigguing needs a short 1 bar melody that plays the notes being played by the melodies... but does not play its own melody. that would complete this track by a mile.

what happened to the great atmospheric sounds in the begining... you should bring those back later on in the track...

ok. mmmm... the hihats and the kick and clap is completerly weared off by the time the silence gets there.. it needs some serious alterations.

add a lead.... add a 1 bar melody that goes along with theo whole shabbang.

The intro sounds like some film I've seen before.

The kick is just ok... the clap sounds out of place. The bassline

The hats are a strange in their patter. In fact, the whole drumbeat doesn't add up in reference to the intro. The bassline sounds very strange in comparison to the strings.

The bassline changing into it's alternative chords sounds forced and trite.

The gates stuff is too big a contrast to the strings since they rest in the same frequency and digital timbre.

The main part doesn't really help the track a whole lot more than give it an additional synthy texture.

The bassline lacks warmth, and the strings do not have any cellos, bass or low strings to keep any warmth. The track feels cold, repetitive, and loop-based.

I'd bin this one and look to a better way to showcase those beautiful strings.

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why did you practically change the whole track? im guessing this is stil the one you were working on as the melody is the same. you were on the right track last time and now you have went back to square one.

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i think i still have the old project file for it... so maybe I can go back to what i had before

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