some good ideas. not eqed properly - it seems like theres some clipping and the bass is overdriving at times

try mixing much lower and you will be able to properly fit all those different tracks in without overpowering certain tracks

i think if you reworked it to make a much more flowing, DRIVING, beat it oculd be a nice beat. personally it sounded like the bass notes were so low that even my monitors were struggling to judge the different velocities and such - you might have been going for that girtty bassline but there are other ways of doing that which if im correct with this assumption, let me know, i can share some different ways.

some of your material though is verrrry workable bro

peace

btw the koncepts mastering is much better although the bass stands out a bit. preference? and a suggestion - in your mixes, try a different breakdown after the first chorus to change it up and give the audience something to anticipate when the second chorus comes back. you will notice alot of major producers do it, and the pick a write a melody that will eventually blend back into the original for POWERFUL chorus

just an idea

You have the melody, you have the feeling but I agree with askspence68 it needs mutch more work. But keep it up, it will be really nice!


Takere!

Akia

thanks for listening.

i agree i couldve done a better job with the mixing. im thinking of going back and working on it again. ill repost if i do.