I can not really see the problem here, you already have the sound! The melody, the atmosphere, the break (it´s so cool!), it´s all there. I´m not a producer my self but you asked for even bad ideas so... I think it should come a climax right were it ends, with a lot of energy. After that, hmmm... when I don´t know where to go with a lyric I go back to the beginning and see if I can reuse something from there. Not sure you can do that with music but, well, don´t think I can help you more .

Hope you find a way to finish it, I really like it!


Takere!

Akia

Ha, I would use other Fx's, those one are overused mate, also, to enchant the Fx's I always pan them in bar with automatization, remember that we listen in stereo so this lil things are really nice for the stereo .
The build up is there, but sounds pretty basic atm mate, if you are beginign I would say u have pretty much the overall idea but it sounds amateur .
The tune is going in good direction, I can hear u have been emulating the b uild up from the clasic Trance tunes, that's a good way to learn .
In overall, the sound is pretty clean, that's a good point, there are some minor details to check out but is pretty clean, the build up and the tune itself sounds amateur but in a good direction, it only needs to be polished and more experience and u have it, the idea is there, and dont over use the Fx's .

Kopi =o.

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thanks for responses!

akia: glad to hear some positives on it.

kopi: could you tell me what sounds amateur about it as this is a problem i want to stamp out.

cheers

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hey man

a new track! nice..

listening:- great drive and very clean sound. percs work well. kick is good.

bass - turn it up in the mix. the warmth will increace.

synths are a bit here and there imo. kinda like the choice of sounds have not been really thought about too much. they need slower introduction. hint on them for a while before they fully arrive into the mix. i would not call this amature. but not fresh sounding. the melodies/sounds are a little generic.

imo i think you should go back to your earlier tracks and remake some of them with your improved prod skills. mainly one of the first you posted ages ago. i liked it. and it had a sound that has dissapeared from you recently. cant place it..



overall this track doesnt make me go wow. if you know what i mean. but there is nothing really unpleasant about it..

rich

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cheers rich. i wanted to remake that track wonderful angel i had a while back although ive lost the cubase file to it and i dont even have the sample i posted on TA to try and recreate it. my producing has gone off course recently, think ive lost alot of my originality elements in tracks.

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Last edited by sterilis on Sep-11-2006 at 02:02

Hey Barry

Firstly, I notice your production skills are getting better, things are a lot clearer, and your equing is better.
Nice start with the percs, and cool melodies coming in. Perhaps they are a little thin sounding though.
Good main melody too, it's nice without being too memorable.
Overall I think you're improving, perhaps you could work on widening the song out a little, and fattening up some of the synths.
Keep it up!

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