Hi there!

found out that I really needed to finish this tune.
So, here it is!
please come with comments. Its very long at the moment!! hehe..
and I hear one thing with the vocal that I will change as soon as pissible.

Ryan - Fade Away (Original)

Help me make it better!

Cheers!

Good bassline!

The kick is a tad hollow. You could try to round it out just a tad. Otherwise, you've got a good sense of motifs and synth lines. I love the porta, you've got there in one of the synths -- very psyish.

I think there's some frequencies conflicting with the bass-bassline (the lower one). I could be wrong, but that's just what my tired ears are telling me at the moment. Otherwise, it's not so bad.

The good thing about this track is the fullness and washing effects that make the buildup more enjoyable. However, a more round, floor-anchored kick would do it better.

Supersaws Alert... I love my cheddar. The vocals aren't to bad, but they could be limited a tad more, or EQed better. Otherwise, they aren't so bad. I think the supersaw that comes in after the break is a tad too cheesy... but others might not think so. It's a bit light and airy with too much sustain and whine.

Vocal stutters aren't bad... but they could have a little more zap and zest to them for variance. The miracle about vocals is that they dump alot of human element into a track, and they can be modified with appropriate effect to suit it better. Keep the stuttering in mind that it's difficult to get too much variation, but it's the right kind of variation that makes it work. Rythmic charm will be a minor point.

Otherwise, it's a worthy attempt at the genre. It's cheesy in some regards, but it's still good musicianship.

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Good intro and a very nicefeeling melody! I agree with B_man about the kick, it could be more round, fater. Think the vocals are pretty good, would need a bit more work yeas, but I like them. Keep working!


Takere!

Akia