Hi everyone , been working busy on 2 projects lately , and this is one of them.
This is a first draft and would like to see what you think of this track and what could be better.
Any feedback is accepted warmingly and lovingly , unless you slate it .

Ultrastellar - Discape (first draft)
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whats up cow men!

lets se what you got here

the bassline its nice, meaby it starts to soon, you know , for the "friendly mix", its not 100% necesary that u make every track with the friendly mix but, just an observation =)

the melows starts
can u downem a lil bit? (volume)
because, with out the melows, the percs and bassline sounded pretty good, but the melows "EAT" pretty much everything XD

so a lil work on the mixdown its what i suggest you to make your track better =)

nice work , nice progress

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hey , cheers , i started this tune 2 nights ago and finished the basis of it today , but im using my roland now and have got a bit exited like a kid because of that arp i made on its editor , so ill look at the volume , first pointer ,
cheers dude

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hi everyone , second draft is up after grabriels post (cheers) can anyone else pick anything out?
cheers

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Originally posted by adi_hanson hi everyone , second draft is up after grabriels post (cheers) can anyone else pick anything out? cheers

er would love to but there is no linke poo. or player

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Originally posted by airwalker1 er would love to but there is no linke poo.

See the first post , it now says second draft , which is the one after gab's suggestion
enjoy!

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Sorry the player has been playing up
click link below and scroll down to player and choose Discape , listen and please comment!

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few thoughts I had:
-nice production
-intro is way too long for me. 40 seconds of cymbals with reverb?
-I like the bassline.
-don't like the synth that comes in at 5:00. It doesn't add anything interesting.
-I think this is one of those trance tracks that make club goers switch to house music. It's just a little too boring to dance to... However I save my judgment for the final version

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Originally posted by moodshaper few thoughts I had: -nice production -intro is way too long for me. 40 seconds of cymbals with reverb? -I like the bassline. -don't like the synth that comes in at 5:00. It doesn't add anything interesting. -I think this is one of those trance tracks that make club goers switch to house music. It's just a little too boring to dance to... However I save my judgment for the final version

Cheers:

As im learning all the time , it was a hihat sample , streched and as you say with added reverb for a bit of experimentation

The synth at 5 mins is actually the bassline several octaves higher , than at the beggining.

But its in its early days yet ,

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wasnt hearing any thing realy rong other than it was a little boring could use a bit of beefing up. try pading things out some more and may be find somethings to play with. all in all goood stuff

when i play it on my system it lacks bottom end power...im not sure if you have a sub base or not ? if you havnt id recomend that you buy one and amaze yourself with the difference it makes when mastering a track for real....if you have one then id recomend boosting the eq a little....add some effects and work on the arrangment and your doing good....keep up the good work...hope this helps....

Hey Adi,

As I am listening on my laptop, I cannot give any advice on mixing. So I'll just go on the arrangement and elements.

- The intro hats have way to many reverb on it, you might want to lower that or sidechain those hats, you'll get a nice effect doing that.
- The clap sounds to dry, you could lower the volume of it (so it sits more in the mix), add a bit of reverb and flanger to it (to make it moving) and layer it with a snare drum (it'll be a lot tighter).
- It sound a bit repetitive, there isn't really something new or exciting in the track. You can change that by adding more high to the pluck you used (automating the Cutoff), A pad or atmospherical aspect could also spice this track up.

I think the production is pretty solid, but it isn't really exciting.

Good job!

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