Here's a rough sample of a new song I started today.

I'm just seeking critique on what I should change, mainly critique on the lead melody please.

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Thanks in advance, guys.

ps; if there is already a thread for track samples, don't crucify me.

cool cool for a split second i thought i was at trance energy
but no anyway good tune

It sounds a lot like some other melody I've heard before. From an epic trance track I think. Also it seems like there's too much reverb on that piano...

oh and normally we post are tunes in the production forums lol but their is no rules in posing then here so ha

I like the lead - the way it starts out and evolves. After the track gets going, with the beat, I almost wanted to hear another note in the arpeggio, every 2-8 beats to create a bit of a contrapuntal feel. I thought the pads behind that part of the lead were also a little too muted and needed to come up, but just ever so slightly - I appreciate what you're trying to do, in so far as creating an atmosphere for the body of the song to occupy.

loose the jumpstyle kick and get a rolling bassline

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Okay, so I revised the critique that was given and changed things around a bit. Here's a sample.

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I'm not sure which one is better now. There's something about the first sample that I feel is better though.

GAH!! SHELVE THE BAASSS!!! SHELVE THE BASSS!!!


Just kidding... but seriously, shelve some of that bass.

The leads and rest of the instruments could come up to a more in the mix. It's a great beginning. This track has excellent potential.

Well I've added more to it now, it's still unfinished. As you can tell, I'm not that good with kicks & bass. So if anybody wants to collab with me, we can make this work.

Here's the update.


Speedyshare isn't working for me atm, so please bare with zippyshare.


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Thanks.

Last edited by Kage_ on Feb-01-2009 at 23:04

yep shave a bit of the bass off at the beggining , and i would say (due to your other post) , stop trying to be like yoji , and progress this a little more with a little more build up than it has , and keep that piano volumed/filtered down for longer , and i can tell you put the thunder in from the tales from the big room version of Theme from banginglobe

but a bit more work , this will be good

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It sounds a bit like you have reverb on the kick..?

It's very "boomy" in the beginning. Bit like a hardstyle type track.. other than that, tis developing great!!!

I would stretch out the melody progression a bit more, because it is very epic but it sort of comes a bit soon, and there's not enough time for the track to develop any tension. This makes it seem a bit empty somehow? You could tease the melody a bit more or use some *similar* motifs (using different instruments/sounds) in the beginning to introduce it?

Nice one

EDIT: on a second listen, it's almost like you're so excited to show us this melody that you... get there a bit early (was going to use some dirty metaphor but decided against it )... you need a bit more foreplay (oops)

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Thanks for the tips, guys.

adi_hanson, I have never even heard of bangingglobe. :P The sameple I used was from a movie sound effects pack, as I do quite alot of epic music. I just love putting my mousic into an environment.

daveth, I'll extend it a bit more, I know what you mean. It still needs alot of work, imo.

Last edited by Kage_ on Feb-03-2009 at 00:27