The initial part needs more variety. The bassline is good... but if you could filter it graddually that would make a little more mobile.

Vocals are too soft, can barely hear what she is saying.

Get rid of Vocals (with maybe one more melodic synth... maybe a 1 or 2 bar melody)?
Like the breakdown without the vocals, love the arp, and instruments are crisp.
A little fast (for my taste).
Too familiar after 3:09 it needs something different then
Very good sound quality and decent mastering except for the vocals (not loud enough)

new instrument at 3:35 would like to hear more

General: i think this track has more potential without the lyrics. (no offense) but that is probably a personal preference. Love the instruments and melodic structure. Nice bassline. However i would add more changes to the synths itself or play with them through effects and offer more breakdowns to let the ears rest a bit.

Please check my track Velvet House (NOT HOUSE) and tell me what you think

Thanks for the comments, the vocal is louder in full stereo, and i would love to add more stuff to the track, like some epic pads and more syhnths to fatten it out, but my memory isnt allowing it at the moment, I need a new computer, im struggling to run more than 3 tracks at a time when using Nexus so its frustrating to have ideas and not being able to put them into action, i wanted the break to be a lot longer, but with the limitations i had on the amount of tracks i could use i couldnt get the variation i wanted to flesh it out, but when i eventually get my new computer i will come back to this track, have you not got a direct link to your tracks? i tend not to download of share sites anymore.

http://soundcloud.com/sernavw/velvet-house-not-house

that is the link. yeah good idea.

i have the same problem with my cpu. usually my only solution is to export these tracks in wav or aif but then hopefully one wont need to make changes to the synths

[QUOTE]Originally posted by Elektrik Storm
Thanks for the comments, the vocal is louder in full stereo, and i would love to add more stuff to the track, like some epic pads and more syhnths to fatten it out, but my memory isnt allowing it at the moment, I need a new computer, im struggling to run more than 3 tracks at a time when using Nexus so its frustrating to have ideas and not being able to put them into action, i wanted the break to be a lot longer, but with the limitations i had on the amount of tracks i could use i couldnt get the variation i wanted to flesh it out, but when i eventually get my new computer i will come back to this track, have you not got a direct link to your tracks? i tend not to download of share sites anymore. [/QUO
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Everyone has that problem, you gotta bounce your tracks man!

hey mate , i like it.