Typing as I listen;

First few bars opening - uber generic - that would make me skip the track right there so alter it I think


First rise has great energy
The rolling elements are quite energetic and effervescent
Mix seems good and clear and kick pounding through

Good transitions
Nice tension
Lots of good individual sounds

Break - bass note 2 sounded off once - maybe a confliction in there

Break main part - getting a bit boring - nothing is particularly grabbing me although it seems very well executed

Rise is a bit generic

Chorus - not enough energy or impact and the hats sound too thin somehow.

Id say a good piece of work well executed but not memorable in terms of melody or sound

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wicked, thanks for your feedback Richard - really good and helpful, so much appreciated!