Alright...*snaps knuckles*

I can hear this track being an amazing deep smooth trance tune, but there are some things to work on here.

First, I would lower the tempo a little bit. It seems a little too rushed. Lowering the tempo will also give it that deep feel. Next up is the bass. Don't get me wrong, I love the bass in the track, but it seems kind of outdated with the basic saw-reso rolling thing. You can fix up the bass by trying to find something like a full bass pad and sidechaining it to the kick. The hats in the tune also feel like they're from the Stone Age. Try working with Sounds-of-Revolution or Pakotec Productions' Bizarre Minimal. Those packs have some nice modern hat patterns you might be looking for. The kick is also kinda weird. It's not really doing much. It just seems like some deep percussive. The pad/lead that comes in at 2.20 is enormously cheesy. Either change the sound or add an arp to it to give it a more driving feel.

The entire idea for the tune is great! There's just some updating that needs to be done, and you could have the track play on TATW or GDJB.

Best of luck; can't wait to hear the final version.

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thats what i call constructive critisism.. awesome thanks.. will look into the bassline and the cheesy pad and lower the tempo a bit. (the cheesy pads track is actually just the same as the piano), need to add more "3d" for the rest of the pads and strings as well.

but its still under production and not a final product and thats why i asked in here for suggestions and comments .
thanks again mate..
/Dannny Wall

No problem!


Good luck with the track, I'm looking forward to hearing the next edit. Let me know when it's out!

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sorry i havent updated the track yet. (was on vacation). will work on it this coming week and after that i need more constructive critisism
(this is my first project using Logic Studio)

Post it up when you update it

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I agree with almost everything that's been said, it does sound dated but I don't think it's a bad thing. I enjoyed it.