Downloaded and took a listen.
The first thing I immediately noticed was the lack of energy. Overall, the track is very uplifting and melodic, but it is seriously lacking in kick...you need to up the bassline in terms of making the high hat a little stronger and give it a little more umph...in fact, to be honest, the entire bassline needs some reworking.
The synths can use some reworking as well...it sounds like a combination of other artists synths, but toned down. The way it's brought in hooks the listener, but it needs some vareity, a little spice...work on it.
As far as the lead melody goes, it's nothing special, but it's not bad. Very unique, though it strays in different directions. If you listen to tracks that have really uplifting and euphoric melodies, you'll notice that they they just don't go up and down like yours, they either stay at a constant direction with the main strings leading, or the synths are so whacked out and unique that they take on a melody of their own(Sonorous - Protonic for example). Your lead melody sounds like it's going somewhere, but it doesn't...it's a bit repetitive.
I can't tell if it's a chill track, or a energetic anthemic one, but whatever it is, you've got a good base to work off of. A little juice here and there, and I'm looking forward to hearing it again, cuz there's no room but for improvement with this one.
Look forward to hearing your work in the future.

Hello!!

I listened to it several times!
I like the melody!
also like alot those drum-breakes or how you call it -
cool bassline!!

the synth at 0:16 should be tweaked alittle i guess ...
also other synths too i guess.... some sound too fruity i guess

the piano is cool though !!

again very cool melodic track, !!!!

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sounds promising, just amateurish + fruity, take out some serious time to it is basically all i can say

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Hey!
good job on the melody, it sound really good.
But it does sound alittle amaturish, if onley you could work on the synths for alittle bit more.


You could make an awsome tune out of this!

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cheers, ive been working on it.. trying different synths..

i jus cant seem to get away from its amateurish-ness

ill keep at it tho.. thats a promise

dj dawson uk

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if your just starting out its not half bad, sounding less amateurish will come, for the structure, I think the main melody part runs a little too long without much variation, its quite nice having said that

You`ve got a nice melodic trance track here... but I have to agree with the others concerning the amateurish sound. The synths should be little bit fatter, maybe you should add more reverb or something, just my opinion though. But the melodies are really nice and with additional production this could turn out to be a great track!

Best regards, Lakeus
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Just need to make it sound a little but phatter

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