The melody and the snares sounds like Nizhonot... was that your intention?
if so... good one, just change the hihats man

you must be very young, if not you have a lot of work ahead of you.
you need to do some music Theory, this is what you need to sound like.
http://www.tranceaddict.com/forums/...?threadid=20567

don't take it to hard, just trying to help

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