I haven't done much in a while, and I thought well, its time to step it up a notch. This is an epic, uplifting piece, composed 100% originally by me, william vance.

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-William


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Last edited by Bassaka on Dec-21-2005 at 18:32

Hey what's up.

Listening now...

- Intro - ok build up - You should use more precussions to give your drums some more depth. It doesn't have to be loud, just loud enough to be audible, you will def notice a difference.

- Baseline - I think you should vary the baseline, it's too simple, try using some different patterns of basslines.

- but at 1:36 there's this underlying noise on the off beat that just sounds like distorted noise. I think you meant to do it, but it does not sound to pleasant, to me at least.

- break is alittle too long, would've been fine if there was more build up.

- Main part of song at 3:25 - not too bad...no comment here

Because the break was too long, there was no juice left in the main part of the song. I would work on building elements up to the main part.

Just my 2 cents.

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Hey, thanks alot for the feedback. And i'm definately going to follow through and build up the percs, either shorten and add events or keep the length and add events within the break.

Thanks alot, I'll update this, however I would like some more feedback TA!

Thanks,(don't I say that too much?)
William

Hey,

Very lively intro, works well on the whole, maybe a bit too stabby for my liking though. The break is nice though the sounds in it seem a little too unoriginal to me, I like to hear things more fresh.

Can't fault any of the production though, maybe a bit on the loud side but that shouldn't take too much altering. It gets a bit samey for me though, maybe try adding some fx in there that pop in and out. The best bit is after the break, the track really comes into its own here.

Good work though, hope this is at least a bit of help.

Hey William,

Nice sounds although I find the use of them a little problematic.

Listened to the track and the breakdown is way too long as the melody isn't strong enough to carry the track for that long without including more elements or sub melodies.
Also the filter sound that hits on the off beat works really well during the main parts of the track but does nothing for the break down.
You have a little whiney synth in the background of the breakdown that gets on your nerves after a while. (Sorry if that sounds harsh).

You could use some pads with good panning on them as the overall mix is really dry at the moment and lacks depth.

The melody over all is nice but a little standard.

You may also want to use Cymbal crashes to accompany the kick stabs in the break down. They tend to sound very flat otherwise.

Good effort though and has the potential to be a really nice track as the main body of the track is really good and chunky which seems to be something that you do well.

Keep up the good work.

Cheers
Nem

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Thank all of you for reviewing. I totally agree with you, however its getting very hard to work on this song as it takes 100% of my cpu. I have a plan though, and I will make this song the best it could ever be, for Trance Addict.

Thanks!!!

William

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Originally posted by Bassaka Thank all of you for reviewing. I totally agree with you, however its getting very hard to work on this song as it takes 100% of my cpu. I have a plan though, and I will make this song the best it could ever be, for Trance Addict. Thanks!!! William

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Thanks,
More to come.

William