omg man? is that hardware synth your using?
well ur intro is pretty... empty?
at 00:30 something when that "guitarr" sound comes in, it doesnt really fit. but the pads are pretty nice, smooth and full. the pluck you have in there almost sounds like a fruity loops wasp effect, i kinda think its enoying but its pretty early in this tune. i like the way u made those strings just pop in there. the whole tune is a bit monotone. and it isnt alot drive in the start. the break is pretty nice but you need a fuller sound i think. the way u made that wasp sound not enoying and all is great, it really fits when the tune "gets going". the whole tune sounds pro but needs more drive. the outro is nice and all, pro sound but way to little drive to be a good dance tune.

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after 4 bar break,I konw why,coz after 1:21 is the answer...but I think at the intro You can do some FX or short atmospheric sounds after each 4 bars...:0 and thats as you said only half of job...I like this some kind bassy guitar(but it hass some noise szzzzz at realease),your main synth is very catchy,and pad(omg) thats is trully dreamy nad very Catchy...I like your punches with reverb at break...
If this track somekind of dream-trance track,i think you need some gentle hats...on thing i don't like-clap(need some clarity,maybe upper mid-high )

overall:
I see fantastic final version
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thanks for all the nice and helpful feedback.

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Hey Richie Dogg

I'm in the middle of revising , so Ill listen and report back later tonight sir

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Kick is nice. Some nice melodies here. Leadmelody is a bit too simple imo, but it sounds nice. Now for the synths, they also sound a bit too simple and basic overall imo, try to use some more effects on them such as chorus, reverb and a little delay, that would make them sound more lively. You could also choose more complex synthsounds instead of those basic ones. The track had a bit of a progressive feel to it, that's cool, but work some more on your percussion, it's very minimal now.

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cheers romi

feedback from the master is always welcome

the track is very early in state atm so ill apply some of yours and others ideas. synth is a preset and hasnt had anything done to it. so i guess its a bit standard..

cheers again guys

rich

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here is the new updated version >http://s15.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=...JL09ZVFIC35GXQ9

any more ideas?

rich

oh and mr palm, go ahead if you fancy a rmx. im lookin forward to your rendition

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Originally posted by dj_palm nice kick, but the break after each 4bar at start sounds abit stupid when nothing more enters. so im not sure i like the intro. like the phaseefect u added on. oh this melodi got so nice chill potensial, its very inpired by older mike stuff i think. sounds like some plastic boy stuff. u wont belive how many cool strings u can add here, i tryed with my synth while it was playing and it fitted so good. i love the athmosphere in it, but u say its more danceable not sure about that. i think u need more strings and stuff on it, but the melody is absolutely GREAT, its so chilled out and so nice, especialy now when im head-rushing(sunday). its alot u can do about the structure on this one also. give it loads of work and it can be a bomb chiller tune. great job could i maybe try make a remix?

I concur pretty much with Palm, and the intro is really empty though, I think you could do a choral version of this, the melodie is really interesting, and a chorused guitar .
The build up is a bit empty also, I would focus in the strcture of the track and would try to add more elements to support the melodie because sounds abit alone.
Other than that this is going pretty good, keep it up .
Kopi =o.

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thanks kopi.

i am working on it now and it is starting to get a bit more full with a nice quick bassline and some tweeking here and there.

rich

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Hey Rich!

Happy new year buddy

I like the chilled vibe of this song.

The main lead is cute.. but it needs something to fatten it up and make it more dynamic. Some reverb maybe?

Overall the song feels empty - that's been mentioned before. I'd love to hear some deeper strings/pads adding some harmony to what's already. If you sync the LFO with the beat and use that on the filter or something on your pads, it may help add some momentum.

It's a very soothing song, and with some added thickness it will be that much more awesome!

Great stuff.. keep at it
Trev

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hey sooper

happy new year to you too mate. thanks for the feedback.

i done a lot of work to it now and its pretty much finished in my eyes...

FULL VERSION HERE> http://www.richardgalemusic.co.uk

what you recon now? any more opinions reviews?

rich

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