EMOTIONAL DISTRESS

Review

A while back I had a really bad back pain, and I couldn't sleep.
So I decided to sit at home all day and feel miserable. I couldn't go
anywhere and I was losing my skin pigment because I had not seen the sun in a while. That's when it occured to me, I'm a sad lonely bastard.
So I sat at home with this back pain and watched T.V. then it came to my life. The commercial that changed it all. It was an ad for a sleeping pill, a drug ad. I think it was called some weird name like Lunesta or something. Either way, I took this stuff and I was knocked out cold. I was tired, happy and sleeping, forgot about pain. The point of the story is that the beginning of this tune reminds me of the music for that ad. It sounds like the song is indeed sad but has a ray of hope. Now, I'm no good when it comes to feelings, but I can tell when the composer is sad.
The plucks at the beginning of the song sound beautiful. The synth that is arpegiatted sets a real mood. WHen the tom kicks in it's a real nice suprise. But why not preserve the solemness of the track and really set the mood by fading the percs in? Instead of just abruptly sticking the tom, fade it in with volume. Maybe some more percs would be nice, give it that new age feel. Some woodblocks. The reeverbed strings really combine nicely with the tune. Sets a real mood. Once the main melody kicks in it really gets into a more trancier sound. Bass is too loud at 2:56, try to just lower down at a bit. My main beef with the kick is that it sounds too generic, like it's the kick FL provides you with. Same with the clap. These elements sound too dry. The Fl sounds need to go I think, the "toil" and "warp" sounds.
The song has a great riff, but it gets repetitive. I honestly didn't like hearing around 3 minutes of the same melody.

THE GOOD

Great mood setting at the beginning.
Nice use of percs
Great choice of synths

NEEDS IMPROVEMENT

Kick is too generic.
The FL sounds are kind of bland (and too loud)
Bassline might be a little too loud.
Melody needs variation, gets too repetitive.
More strings needed after build up.
Reeverbed clap would have been nice, some elements are too dry.

FINAL SCORE

Great idea, cool atmosphere, real mood, sounds like this song
gives off a little hope. Sounds realy New Age at the beginning.
Has strong points, but still needs that flare and spice. Fix it up!






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Tracks

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EoJ-cL2G_qY