well, in my ears it sounds pretty much the same all the way from birth to death, i really dont feel i get bonded with the changing emotions in here as you say, nearly no emotion at all. i also feel that the kind of tension that should have been here gets flattened out while using the much of the same synth-leads for the climax as you use for the intro. in my opinion this track is a big yawn, but its not badly produced and stuff, its just that I've tasted tracks like this too many times and i dont feel that its adding something new and flavorish to my tired ears.

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Yah! Intro is fine but after two minutes song became too happy for my taste. I like dark slumbers of death if it's about melody.
Anyway some of my friend said it's a masterpiece.