I'm not as 100% a fan of this one as the other two I commented on. I don't find anything in particular that I could identify as wrong but I like your two more recent posts better.

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Agent Starchild
Durham, NC, USA

Those who share the wealth of their knowledge will end up far wealthier and more loved. Those who use their knowledge as a throne from which to sneer at others will never have a true friend.

Tracks-in-progress (Please help me make these better):
Eve of the Invasion
The Realm of Possibility

Yes, theyre not like the other ones, theyre created from other ideas and states of mind, the songs also have different amounts of process-time. But I still bother sending them out here just to share my thoughts now and then, to get my daily doze of attention:P