Hi mate, there is a lot of things to improve here, the intro idea is pretty cool, but you'll want to accompany that idea with other elements as pads, strings etc. Pretty much everything else needs presence. Kick drums needs to be compressed, other percussions equalized, the leads need a boost in brightness etc.

It is good that you have your ambitions clear, set goals for the near future, and leave your biggest ambition for the last.
One thing I can recommend, read the tutorials provided in this place, they are gold, it helped me a lot in the past, and helped many others.

Welcome aboard.

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