Hmmm... interesting.

Speed is a bit too fast for my liking but that's personal.

When you filter the first hook out at about 1:50ish, when you bring it back in it might have been worth changing the melody there and then, would have been a nice progression.

Snare sample sounds very standard and either needs effects or changing as it's very dry in comparison to the over all mix.

Could also do with a bit more melodic variation as the main hook isn't interesting enough. Alternatively perhaps write something over the top that you introduce.

The track is a wee bit too bouncy eurodisco sounding for my taste and needs some more development in terms of percussion.

However, given the time that you have been doing this I think it's a very impressive turn out even if it didn't blow my socks off in terms of artistic content.

Thanks for sharing.

cheers
Nem

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u cant keep the same sound and melody all the way through the track.

also yes it does sound a little bit like cheesey euro disco as the other guy said. but overall for 5 months in its not too bad.

Hey,

1) The first half of the song doesn't go with the breakdown. There are many ways you can change that.
2) The drumroll you used at the end of the breakdown is kind of cheesy
3) The beat that's left over in the outro doesn't go with the melody.

Leave some feedback on mine please!

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keep at it.

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the break is a completely different song

when you bring back the filtered part....you should hit it there with the main melody that you've yet to come up with....

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