Hi everybody,

Yesterday I finished the break of this track, although I haven't worked any further, I could really use some feedback on this one.

Link: Theran - TBA . * Link fixed *



I have created this track using mainly V-station, Z3ta, Supernova II, FM7.

Thanks.

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Last edited by Theran on Mar-17-2008 at 08:22

link is broken.

Ah I see where this track is going much more now!

I still don't like that synth you use for the melody stab in the buildup i'm afraid though. It needs to be widened, I say play with some panning or stereo imaging and filter out some of the mid range (that would help, but I have a feeling that the three notes you're using just might not go great together..) Some more reverb on it might do some good too, those echoes are a little empty-sounding. This becomes really obvious at the very start of the breakdown when this synth is the only thing playing. It sounds a bit stark and lonely, there definitely needs to be some other soft sounds and FX going on there to fill the void. But I gather you've only just started on the breakdown so you'll fill it up as you progress I'm sure.

Love the new melody and saw synth that the breakdown brings in though! The best part of the track is when it kicks back in and this sawtooth is playing alone without that buildup synth. Its a breath of melodic fresh air and the uplifting factor finally kicks in. I really think you should bring a little essence of this melody into the buildup too, without giving too much of it away too early, but the buildup sounds too generic like it could be from any track - I reckon give your audience a little hint of the greatness to come!

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Thanks for your great comment. I am glad you like it. You are right about that intro synth though, I will work on another sound tonight and try to replace it. What you said it could be every other song because it doesn't have a real unique build up is also true, I am going to try to reveal a little of the lead before the breakdown.

And you're right about the break, but I'm still working on that.

Thanks!

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Upcoming releases:
Hernandes ft. Stine Groove - Without You (Kyota remix) (Redux Recordings)
Kyota - Senegal (Flashover Recordings)

Last edited by Theran on Mar-17-2008 at 13:37

everything is put together very nicely but it is missing a catchy hookline and it would finish it off nicely

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I finished the track and sended it to Bonzai... You'll hear what the response is.

Thanx for the feedback!

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Upcoming releases:
Hernandes ft. Stine Groove - Without You (Kyota remix) (Redux Recordings)
Kyota - Senegal (Flashover Recordings)

Ow yeay.. Forgot to mention.

It was signed to Bonzai

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Hernandes ft. Stine Groove - Without You (Kyota remix) (Redux Recordings)
Kyota - Senegal (Flashover Recordings)

The breakdown is great

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Originally posted by Theran Ow yeay.. Forgot to mention. It was signed to Bonzai

WOW man, felicitations!! You must be over the moon. I look forward to hearing what you ended up doing with that lead and breakdown, you must have worked some real magic to get it signed straight away like that!

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