My teeth! MY TEETH!!

Joking.
But I'm curious... Why is it you want to know what we think? I assume you like it, and you don't mention being hung up on any particular problem your having finishing it. So I'm not sure how our constructive criticism could actually be.. well... constructive!

If you're just unsure of whether or not its any good, bare this in mind: Even if everyone on this forum boo'd you off the stage, there's still lots of listeners, yourself included, who'd want encore. So our tastes on your sense of art and style really doesn't amount to much, know what I'm sayin?

Conversely, if there's some kinda technical bits that are problematic, well, that's a different matter. But you haven't mentioned any issue there, so... *shrug*
Or, heck, anything you perceive as a problem. So yeah. What IS the problem? Aside from it not being entirely arranged yet.

Not really trance IMO, I'd more describe it as prog.

Its pretty nice actually, very atmospheric, very much what I'd like to include in a set. I'd swap the kick out for a nice deep 909 kick, let midsy and more rounded.

In terms of intro, you just need to start with kick and work up. Its one of those tracks that will work best that way IMO. Have a look at way out west - the warning, for a similar structure.

The ideas are a little scattered, it'd be good to get a powerful distinctive riff going on, maybe change what your doing with the bells to be a bit better melodically, certainly, I feel that theres two seperate parts to the song; from 1:06 its completely different.

It needs a distinctive sample, or an unusual sound to make it stand out. OR if your trying to write a filler track, it needs a simpler melody which isn't so hard to follow.

Its well engineered though, good job on the mix and the sound design

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Originally posted by MOK My teeth! MY TEETH!! Joking. But I'm curious... Why is it you want to know what we think? I assume you like it, and you don't mention being hung up on any particular problem your having finishing it. So I'm not sure how our constructive criticism could actually be.. well... constructive! If you're just unsure of whether or not its any good, bare this in mind: Even if everyone on this forum boo'd you off the stage, there's still lots of listeners, yourself included, who'd want encore. So our tastes on your sense of art and style really doesn't amount to much, know what I'm sayin? Conversely, if there's some kinda technical bits that are problematic, well, that's a different matter. But you haven't mentioned any issue there, so... *shrug* Or, heck, anything you perceive as a problem. So yeah. What IS the problem? Aside from it not being entirely arranged yet.

I'm just wanting to see if I'm actually making some sort of progress in learning Reason and maybe getting a decent product. There are a lot of people who think their sh*t is the sh*t whereas it's generally accepted as tripe. I am trying not to progress in such a fashion.

As for kitphillips:

I've already dropped the kick in favor of a new one, and will probably work out an intro later this week. Thanks for your ideas, and I'll check out The Warning.

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Ehhh, dunno if I agree with your idea there, but I see what you're getting at I spose.

BTW, your work actually reminded of an intro track to one of my favorite mix compilations, the Max Graham Transport 4 mix. Deep Funk - Too Heavy. Just off vague memory... And I can't find a link to an example of it, unfortunately, but keep your eye out for it. Its style seemed compatible with where you're goin.

Update:

Found the time to add a basic little intro, and tighten up the percussion a little bit. I might tweak the kick a little more...Also tried to mesh the two parts of the track together just a bit, will probably use the bell lead as a bit of accent later on. Working on the real lead...Or rather, how to lead into the real lead that I've had in my head for some time. You'll hear the basic form of this at the end of the cut.

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I kinda went through and adjusted levels, but I probably let something slip, so apologies for that, it's been a long day, heh.

I'll see if I can't find Too Heavy, thanks for the tip

EDIT: Uploaded the wrong sample somehow , so fixed that.

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Last edited by ReclusNdangrmnt on Feb-10-2009 at 07:48

Bump! I'd like to see what you think of this, 'cause I feel it's getting close.

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It's an embedded player, now...Might wanna try to get it signed, eventually :P

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