The noise rhythm-hiss seems a little out of place, because it seems lo-fi in comparison to the synthwork...But I like where it's going! Nice and brooding.

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Really like your track - a lot. The synth programming and layering is great. Wher I find the track falls down is the percussion. The kick doesn't sound right, the rhythm of the hiss does not fit in with the tracks percussive arrangement. I like the overall element programming but the percussion needs to be more complimentary of the synths, and provide the drive they are begging for.

Just my 2c, but good work - look forward to hearing it again.

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Originally posted by DJ RANN Really like your track - a lot. The synth programming and layering is great. Wher I find the track falls down is the percussion. The kick doesn't sound right, the rhythm of the hiss does not fit in with the tracks percussive arrangement. I like the overall element programming but the percussion needs to be more complimentary of the synths, and provide the drive they are begging for. Just my 2c, but good work - look forward to hearing it again.

Thanks is is very helpful and encouraging. I knew that percussion was the weak point. I only have one loop for the highs, one for the hiss, and then the kick. So I hadn't put a lot lot of time into it. Plus I haven't done anything to my samples. Before I was just planning on tweaking things a bit, and adding some more variation. Now I think I should go back to square one and learn how to modify the samples to get the sound I need. Maybe even completely rework the beat to give it more drive/kick.

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Originally posted by TWD Thanks is is very helpful and encouraging. I knew that percussion was the weak point. I only have one loop for the highs, one for the hiss, and then the kick. So I hadn't put a lot lot of time into it. Plus I haven't done anything to my samples. Before I was just planning on tweaking things a bit, and adding some more variation. Now I think I should go back to square one and learn how to modify the samples to get the sound I need. Maybe even completely rework the beat to give it more drive/kick.

I would definitely do that - the track as it stands just needs better drive and percussion. Listen to some Jaytech tracks - the way he builds percussion with heavily melodic synths parts would suit this track a lot. IMO, I would start the perc from scratch with a new punchy kick and give the the rest of the perc a prog style rhythm....but that's just me

I'm not going to do any sort of in-depth review as its your first track.
Its a great track for you first but you need to soften up the noise a bit. The hissing sounds too abrasive, maybe hi pass it a bit more, possibly phase it a tad and if its on a synth open the release just a bit.
It will give it a softer feel which would suit the track better.