In my personal view , it needs a lot of work.

The first bit and the the kick sound a little flat.

The first synth comes in too out of place.

FX can be a good or bad thing , to many to little? who knows , but i would beef this up with more fancy noises and such.

And this tune is crying out for sidechained white noise between transitions.

I would make the break at 5 mins the focus of the whole tune.



No complaints about the melodies , there quite sweet

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Thanks for the tips i might rework it one day

Ive listened to it again , and you really have a good base for a good tune.I would love to look at the way this is made up and set out.And i would like to remix it if you will? If your happy with that of course? you just need to send me the FLP , pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeease?

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sure i'll be happy to listen to the remix.. but dont u need the same vsts samples and such to listen to the full tune on fl?

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Originally posted by alanik sure i'll be happy to listen to the remix.. but dont u need the same vsts samples and such to listen to the full tune on fl?

Ye , but it dosnt matter , you still can get the layout and automation.And whatever instruments you use , i might have anyway hopefully

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I like the ideas in this track it has a good feel to it.

I dont really hear any bassline though?

I would like to work a remix of this tune too if thats cool, it jsut gives me alot of ideas. jsut send me a PM if ur interested

Aw! Reminds me of cute girls.

Last edited by meriter on Jun-03-2009 at 17:41

here is the fl file for anyone who wants to remix the song

http://www.sendspace.com/file/8tymfx

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Originally posted by alanik here is the fl file for anyone who wants to remix the song http://www.sendspace.com/file/8tymfx

Cheers!

But on a note , ive had a look and you need to organise stuff more

ill keep in touch and see what i can do.

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I agree with some of the other comments. Needs some brushing up for sure. Good melodies needs to be organized better. Bass lines need to be more punchy and groovy. Keep working at it. You'll get it.

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This track makes me smile.



I think it's fine how it is!